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Moonlight hunt

dripping sweat on a freezing night
the scent of blood lingers
the blood of a careless vampire
silver eyes glowing in the night
long bronze hair in springy ringlets
running down a firmly toned body
silver venom to match those glowing eyes
that sloshy satisfying feeling after a drink
remembering the hunt as it happened...

In a tree she watched her prey
she was a owl that seemed to glow in the dark
black thirsty eyes as she watched her prey
they stalked another dame
the pale skin and angelic features
silky black hair and the scent of wildflowers
feel the mouth water with burning venom
thirst and instincts take over

leap from the tree and land in silence
the owl is a woman of an ancient race
she talks to the vampire in a soft voice
grabbing his attention with an annoyed expression before
he cant look away her beauty stuns
but soon makes her the thought target as she draws him closer
his fangs unsheathed ready to hunt the woman
yet he has no idea why she apeals to him so
why he feels faint in her presence
yet he must try hunt her

she giggles as he flirts making an advance
she too lets her fangs slide slowly down
as she keeps a firm grip on the sword behind her back
flirting back to him and winking
he pulls her close to kiss her lips
and starts to work to her neck
she smirks as she feels him
and then takes strike

dripping sweat on a freezing night
feeling satisfied and well fed
his body on the ground as she slowly walks away
only turning to blow him a kiss to give her thanks for the meal
she slips down and suddenly
becoming a glowing white lioness
before vanishing into the night

A contest entry

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  • Daxteriana
    August 6

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    Wow. This was very demonic. Vampire killers and a fallen vampire victim makes this piece so...brilliant. I like it. Good luck in my contest!

    Dax


  • Ativyen Volst
    May 30
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    Who can understand this better..lol..a good write


  • Ice Queen
    May 1

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    This is an amazing piece it reminds me of Twilight. I loved it, good job!


  • TheJuggaloKing
    January 12

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    Hmmm very interesting seems she has used those things for more than food but there is one who is getting better at stopping


  • nichtmich silver member
    December 17, 2008

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    The sexy seductive siren who is herself a vampire killer, interesting and unique idea! Thank you for your entry.


  • Skwisgaar Skwigelf
    November 24, 2008
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    i agree with the last commenter really good.


  • Learning2PaintYou
    November 7, 2008
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    I like that this poem tells a story (narrative poetry).

    Thank you for your entry.


  • trekkergirl
    November 7, 2008

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    please go back and read what I want from this. I just don't want any story. I want a story that tells me about the 2 men with Jesus on the cross.


  • Dark Otter
    November 1, 2008

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    You did great, Danzy

    This is your most descriptive write. It was very visual, very intimate and true to the genre. Two thumbs up to the Aussie girl


  • Anemone-Rose
    October 31, 2008
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    lovely, lovely, what a story it seemed to flow from the page. i could feel everything.

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