I’ve tried to put this out of my mind
This horrendous atrocity
Banish the memory
But it lingers, robbing me of my sanity
For years I’ve felt the sting of regret
Plotting what to do
My heart says it’s wrong
My mind tells me to revenge you
So tonight, this night of all hallows eve
When darkness closes in
I’ll finally do it
I’ll revenge your soul, finally we’ll win
No one will ever know of this crime
Except for the demons
Now hidden in the night
The conscience of those heartless ones
I shall quietly stalk their demonic souls
As they knock on every door
Disguised as innocent children
Their greedy fingers reaching for more
But first I shall expose them
Look into their eyes
Rip the masks from their faces
See their fear, these I so despise
Revenge weighs heavily on my mind
As Halloween looms in its banality
And even if I’m caught
I’ll be innocent by reason of
… insanity
Dee Garner
© October 31, 2008
Just another Partners in Crime contest poem
Author notes
Option #1
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A contest entry
- Partners In Crime Members Only by Partners In Crime.
725 points, ended November 13, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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imagination. you are truly a great
story teller and this poem holds you
in its grip right up to the very end.
great poem Dee Garner.
Artie
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wow! you have quite an
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Inspiring
Beautiful, moving, captivating, enchanting, and it just feels so real. I adore it. -
Hood Wink!
I got a little chill up my spine reading this!
Darkly rich and deep this is a great write
Congrats on the Silver
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
(Apologies for late Hood-Wink!)
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100th Hoodwink!!!
This is great! I was glued to every word, from beginning to end. Great imagery! Congrats on the silver, well deserved...
Love & light
Debbera
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Congratulations!
This is very good, a look into the mind of someone who plots revenge to his own undoing. The underlying crime and the crime considered are so far apart in importance, the insanity is made clear. I'm feeling this horror physically, it is well deserving of a silver, if not gold.
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Superb, you understand
Everything about this poem
Is so very right
Cats are, too, coming and going
Like this every night
Tiki Cat
Buy Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
"Too Good For Humans"
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Ah, Dee ~
what a tribute to my friend insanity
I like this poem a lot. THere's something about it that absolutely captivates.
Congrats on your shiny.
All the best, Zach -
excellent~
Very creepy sis...
Was perfect for Halloween
Didn't know you had this dark side
And hope you placed in the contest
Twas a winner in my book
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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oooh! Very creepy! Me love!
Best of luck!
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Must have been the full moon... brings out a little insanity in everyone LOL Great to read you again Dee... Hope you did well on this contest
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Hmm im wondering whats underneath those masks.
Are there monsters or is this lady insane? I like the idea tha the ladys insane so im going to go with that. I like the part "Their greedy fingers reaching for more"
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poor kiddies!!!
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I think the insane own the world Dee
...nobody can steel their innocence from them...not even on Halloween..
Loved your write,
XXJeannette
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How delightful are the pleasures of poets who appreciate the ability to be different in a harmless way. A great poem!
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O.O
fantastic
um wow
*praise*
now that there see i'm facinated by everything but this is crazy awsome and of the hook reader hooking
i gotta read this thing again
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oooooh awesome write!
best of luck with this!
Tasha
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Excellent
This is excellent alright....I loved this. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Countrybabe
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oh this is excellent, so dark just up my alley. Great imagery in this poem and i very much enjoyed it.
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Wow, Sis... I better not get on your bad side, especially on Halloween
This is kinda creepy
Good luck in the contest
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And I thought I was mean taking away all those childrens Goodies almost makes me feel glad those three preteens took all our ill gotten goodies away.
(( Just Kidding ofcourse))
This was really a good Halloween piece I enjoyed it very much.
I loved those last two lines.
And even if I am caught
I will be found innocent by Insanity.
I wish you good Luck in the contest
" HAPPY HALLOWEEN "
ED.
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So....you're the one with the rotten apples handed out to the kiddies uh? Just kiddin. Pretty scary senerio versed here. Just threateningly vague enough to make a reader shiver in what our lill' imaginations can conjure.
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