I stood on a hill at the edge of the night
With half in the darkness and half in the light
The world of the shadows, the world of the sun
And me in the middle belonging to none
Across a great distance I saw with my eyes
An ocean of men calling out battle cries
Half loyal to darkness, half loyal to light
And I'm on a hill at the edge of the night
With faces of demons, e'er closer they came
While cursing and killing, they're calling my name
And I am not worthy nor willing to fight
I'm just on a hill at the edge of the night
So cruel and sadistic the war that is waged
The hatred and anger cannot be assuaged
And I must discern who is wrong and who's right
A man on a hill at the edge of the night
Death by the sword or the tip of a lance
Can be preordained or just happen by chance
But neither is worse than my pitiful plight
I'm stuck on a hill at the edge of the night
A contest entry
- Seashells by KevinDunn.
550 points, ended December 2, 2008, 35 entries
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AGAIN, WOW!
I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!! I can seriously relate to this poem especially the first stanza "me in the middle belonging to none" . again u amaze me
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Being in a place and time
where others see to disagree
on ideas that are not mine
but who is forced to fight -- it's me
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yet the darkness cannot over take us, for Christ holds us. for those of the light cometh to the light, those not of the light,never come into it.
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^.^
It is nice to get on every know and then and read some of your work. I thought this was interesting..
Even if I am sort of lost...
What braught this specific write on?
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I found this poem of yours
... quite by accident by found it to be well shared! I so enjoy form poetry that has substance like this one and although it is a wee bit sad ... I know that you also see light in the sun! j
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So great! What wonderful flow, and expression of words. Many interpretations can come through this. Great read.
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perfect rhyme as always and filled with darkness.
great job.
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oh man you are my favorite poet
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In the second stanza 'battle cries' just doesn't go with the rhythm in the rest of the piece but that is the only thing that was off in this beautiful poem.
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What a beautiful idea beautifully expressed in the first stanza. It's the kind of thing I try and fail to write all the time
And definitely the idea of war between dark and light, that's a very "me" thing.
Have you seen Nightwatch or Daywatch?
Assuaged! Love that word
"preordained or just happen by chance" - awesome
Love it.
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