My saddness goes deeper than you can see, my love
"aww are you tired?" you ask me
I say NO
After lying there next to you with my eyes closed, just to get your attention.
"aww are you bored?" you ask
I just shake my head, almost in tears
for sometimes I can't hide my depression around you.
But you never see it.
And I can't help you anymore.
As much as I'd like to.
But my saddness runs too deep than you will ever see, my love.
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1200 points, ended November 28, 2008, 32 entries
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boy does my husband lead a double life? this sounds like him...lol men are so completely oblivious sometimes...i can definately relate to this! thank you
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Sad.
:[.
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wow.
this is really deep. i love the intensity your words brought. its an amazing write. sometimes, you cant keep solving other people's problems when you haven't even handled your own problems. you've expressed it very well. keep penning
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Very well thought out.
You've put so much emotion into just a handful of lines. You've painted great imagery.Good luck in the contest.
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Killer!
That's so incredible...incredibible...incred-able?I don't know if I spelled it right any of those times, but your're smart so have to know what word I was going for!Lol
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