sitting like a baby in a fairy tale
in her pilly and too tight cotton sun-suit
she was snatched up like a potato
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Author notes
yes, true.
probably the hardest case I was handed.
A contest entry
- 25 words by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended November 2, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yes... a crime so frequent, so often unsolved, and so thoroughly heart-breaking; stealing our futures...very powerful words here...PK
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Chilling!
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You know, I didn't comment when it was in my contest because I was a bit of a scatterbrain that day -
but I had the hardest time deciding between you and Muddy. This should have placed too.
This is something that I cannot even imagine...at all. I am a bit neurotic about my children when in stores or if they are outside playing - and we always think we're safe at home.
Thats what is so scary.
This was...I don't want to say excellent because of the subject matter, but it is what it is. If that makes sense.
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This is heartbreaking, yet excellent. So short, but it says plenty... amazing.
♣ Tegan -
Fragments of absolute clarity that say 1000 times more than the report will have done.
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hmm simplicity, this one caught me off guard, hard to describe, just gave me an odd image
the whole idea behind this was captivating though, but that might be the way you described it
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ooph.. this hurts, but you've written it very well..you said all there is to say.
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=(
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You've told a whole story in so few words - the image of potato gives dirt, and grave, sad and very well done.
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yikes. Such a sad-startling vision here. I'm with Suz.
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I donno how you cope with things like that. I don't think that I could do it, Heidi, moreover, I don't think I could do it and write it so concisely.
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Sigh...the children's ones always seem the hardest because they are the most unnecessary ones. Yet they seem to happen so frequently C
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This is like a slap in the face Heidi,
Wowza, you didnt have to say much did ya.
Good luck in the contest my friend
Ken
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i find myself doing a lot of healing now that i am retired...
working there is no time...
now i have lots
and it brings up things
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geez..
this is hard. wow.
m
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thanks for taking the time Mary
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i have to assume the outcome was not a good one.
So few words but what implications!
nice one, Heidi
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not a good one
and i find myself now retired... remembering these bad cases more and more....
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oh gosh, this is so sad & so well written.
~helen
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thanks helen for taking the time to comment
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you're welcome. I really liked it.
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