i was bruised
white
with misplaced
pathos
exposed
and pointless
a plaster
of lilies
in paris
no longer
adorable's
glare
merely
a statue
of
anonymous
In a list
A contest entry
- 25 words by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended November 2, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Your poems leave me breathless, reading and rereading. The placement of words makes this one superb. Congratulations on the Gold here.
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Beautifully done congratulations.
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Stellar.
♥
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25 words, and your poetry represents a feeling that, I believe, all members of humanity have experienced at some point in his/her life. The idea of misplacing pathos is one that boggles my mind, yet it makes sense. I usually think of the appeal to emotion as hit or miss, but sometimes it gets tucked behind the plaster of the masks we don.
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Excellent closing. Good luck
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So much for me thinking about entering the contest. 
Love that this is in the past tense, but even while reading, gave me a "still feels this way" feeling.
"a plaster
of lilies
in paris"
I LOVE THAT!!!
Like the entire freakin thing, the imagery cuts me with how good it is. This part...I could smell it. 
"statue
of
anonymous"
Oh man, I never would've thought of doing such short line breaks, but I love it this way.
'anonymous' makes me think of 'quidam', which makes me love it even even even even more.
Jessica
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Brilliant
just like you...
This one leaves me speechless with only a sigh to leave
sigh~ ~ ~ ♥
Lynda
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i really love stanza three... i love the twist of 'plaster of paris'.
-helen
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Your beginning was my favorite.
In general, I mean. lol
Thanks for Being, my Friend.
Good luck in Melissa's contest, Scribe.
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it's more than that girl
and you know it
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your ending was my favorite.
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