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my blacked wing hawk, and brown signing tree

a black winged hawk
and a brown singing tree
they listen to me talk
and watch over me

they watch us fight
they hear us shout
I know it aint right
with out a doubt

I remember the days
of love and touch
now your in a haze
and I don’t care much

you broke my heart
right in two
ripped apart
because of you

so I say a final goodbye
and look in your eyes
I used to see an ally
now I see a disguise

what happened to your love?
tears fall from my face
and float to heaven above
or is that just empty space?

I look at you as I walk away
your beautiful black hair
those eyes that betray
and your face cold and bare.

and my black winged hawk
and brown singing tree
watch her and gawk
at what she could be

Author notes

my first poem ever written i just found this site and decided that i wanted to know what people think.

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my first poem i ever tried what do you think?

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Comments


  • Rajia
    October 30, 2008
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    It's cute. Made me smile.