A small crumpled form lies on the edge of the marsh;
The inner warmth has been replaced with a deep chill.
Her young life has escaped a world so cold and harsh
Leaving behind a earthly remains, eternally still.
On this dark, dismal ground, she lies so far from home
She was just another missing milk carton kid
Had she fled abuse, or just decided to roam,
Or had she decided to live off the grid?
Sadly she looks down on her pale, lifeless form.
This is not how she imagined her life would be;
A loving husband, children, a home nice and warm
Not a pale corpse next to a gnarled, rotted tree.
Slowly, she spirals upwards, towards the distant light;
A sense of relief, instead of endless despair.
Free from it all she shakes off the chill of the night;
Gently rising to heaven on currents of air.
Author notes
Prompt 3. http://media.photobucket.com/image/dark/ShadowX00/Birds.jpg?o=172
A contest entry
- Take Me to the Dark Side by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended November 13, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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aaaaaaah, a nice positive finish to a sad tale. Nice! Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Sometimes I just can't do dark no matter how hard I try. Other times, it is all I can do. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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I loved loved loved the end.
Dark can change, can it not?
We can rise again, and maybe this is what dark should be about. But what do I know.
Fabulous poem, full of heartbreaking emotions, the entire spectrum.
Best wishes,
jin
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Thank you for reading and the enthusiastic comment. It is much appreciated. I thought that a more uplifting ending was appropriate.
Mike
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This has such a dark tragic begin, was rather surprised at the turn to happy, but much enjoyed. A great read, all the best in the contest
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I dunno what happened. I had dark thoughts in mind, but I just could not bring myself to finish them that way. My dark muse was on strike. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Really loved reading this tragic tale. I especially loved the description of her as;
' just another missing milk carton kid'
It really brought her to life. Very dark and emotive write. Great.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. It is much appreciated. I kinda liked that line myself.
Mike
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you did an awesome job here my brother.... you always do such wonderful work...... you can just look at a pic and bring out a story no one is expecting.......... your awesome....... hugs.......!
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Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a difficult write.
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ummm it was indeed very dark in the begnning but it sweeten in the end..I like it though, for it has many things to cope from... the rhyme was good and so was the imagery.. nicely done! thanks for sharing
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I wanted just dark, but I have trouble not doing a happy ending.
Mike
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