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Life Solstice

 

Follies of egotistical youth we cannot deny.

Caustic brutality of our lost childhood, and

the rapture of time, leaves the lucid alabaster icon

on the seasons of life.

 

 

We forage through the summer topaz,

of our orthodox lives, as if in a garden

of knowledge, the juniper decorates our lives

with paisley and xenial.

 

 

Winter solstice comes at the end of our youth.

Morbid neurosis vacillates the quicksilver minds,

replaced by hedonistic greed. Eventually,

the zeitgeist is reborn within the urban mind.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

All words used:

Alabaster, brutality, caustic, deny, egotistical, forage, greed, hedonistic, icon, juniper, knowledge, lucid, morbid, neurosis, orthodox, paisley, quicksilver, rapture, solstice, topaz, urban, vacillate, winter, xenial, youth, zeitgeist.

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 4

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    Congradulations! You did a wonderful write you have here. Wonderful flow, and the deail was excellect. A pleasure to read.


    • freespirit51
      March 4
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      Golden eyes 25

      Thanks again as you can see some of these words were a bit tricky. Glad you enjoyed.


  • georgies shane
    November 14, 2008

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    congratulations on your trophy. it was definitely well deserved as this is a beautifully written piece.
    shane

    • freespirit51
      November 15, 2008
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      georgies shane

      thanks for the congrat on the HM. Also I am glad you enjoyed this piece. It was and interesting challenge for sure.


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    This poem reeks of age to me. It vividly describes a life, from start to finish and I love the take on words that you delivered.

    The only gripe I have is that I'm not certain that xenial was used correctly but meh - I'm probably just being nitpicky.
    Nonetheless, thank you for your entry and good luck!


    • freespirit51
      November 15, 2008
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      Bean Sidhe

      Thanks so much for your kind words and for the HM. It was a great challenge


  • arafura gold member
    October 31, 2008
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    Great work my friend. Excellent!


  • forevermyangel14
    October 30, 2008

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    wow. that's so beautiful, very descriptive i dont know what else to say..speechless


    • freespirit51
      October 30, 2008
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      xMorphinex

      Thanks for the wonderful words. So glad you enjoyed.

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