The girl walks along the pathway
unsure where she's going
not a word to say
so there's no way of knowing
she holds a heart in her hand
and cries with her head down
she throw her heart in a trash can
on her face a giant frown
the path is faded
so she can barley see
her soul become tainted
as her eyes begin to bleed
she screams a loud cry
and bows to her knee's
she whispers" I'm going to die"
"my heart is no longer with me"
she puts her head on her lap
and closes her eyes slowly
looks like a peaceful nap
as she dies before me.....
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you go girl
haha go anna! :] i love this one. like i love it oober much! lol. keep writing those poems in study hall. we can write one together. lol. probally not. yours are too good! lol. :]
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;o this was a pretty good poem. I loved it ;D... I can feel the emotion also, it's full of it. :] Love it&&amazing write&&Ace... :]
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Quite nice
This poem is very narrative, I like how I can follow along and picture what's going on. Also, it's very macabre. Radd. -
This is awesome!
The rhyming and flow was perfect.
This is deep and full of emotion.
I agree with tiredxofxsunsets - there are some gramatical errors that you could fix. Other than that the poem is great.
Great Job.
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woah i really liked this. very well done. i love the rhyme and it flowed increcibly well.
unsure where shes going
not a word to say
so theres no way of knowing
^^ loved that so much
there are some spelling/gramatical errors i think you could fix "she scream(s) a loud cry"
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