Behind my mask
is everything you will never see,
you tell me to take it off
and to enjoy being free.
But through my mask,
I see so many disgusting things;
my mask the only thing protecting me
from the horrors the world brings.
People are sick,
some are dying,
others are the killers,
and most are lying.
I don't want to be mixed up
with all the hate that's going around,
there's so much now that the
human race has practically drowned.
So here you are
fixing to ask me again,
but the answer is still no,
I refuse to take off my mask.
And if you want to survive,
this thing called life,
just make your own mask,
that's your only price.
A contest entry
- Freeballin by kermie4201.
900 points, ended November 2, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Interesting idea here. It's sort of ironic that you describe the way everyone lies negatively and yet the speaker refuses to take off the mask. Good job.
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"...it's the only thing protecting me"
"But through my mask,
I see many horrible things,
and it's the only thing protecting me
from the things the world brings."
Nice! XD
♥
Rayne
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this is amazing!! great write......im katelynn by the way....
maybe we can talk or something
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To be honest, I didn't really feel anything when I read this. The whole hiding behind a mask has become very cliche in poetry. Everybody and their dog have used that metaphor.
I'm not saying this is a bad poem, btw. It's quite decent.
Thanks for entering!
Good Luck in the contest!
- Aly, the co-judge -
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ok. thanks for your opinion.
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Not sure it was quite what i was after but great write anyhow.
thanks for entering.
Laura -
Very true !!!! Congrats on the cold Well done
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Wow well done poem! (I can see why you entered it so many times lol). It is very well written and I can relate so well. You took the idea of a mask and put a fresh spin on it.. Well done. Best of luck in the contest. Keep on writing. ~TC
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well done i like this one alot although the last line doesnt quite do it for me good luck
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This was awesome and soooooooo true!!!Great!
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Good write. I can relate to this, although it is sad.
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yeah I think it fits the prompt because it is about faces or a mask. It is very well written. And keeps the readers attention. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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omg.omg.omg. thats so excellent.
I don't want to be mixed up
with all the hate that's been going around,
there's so much now that the
human race has practically drowned.
my favoutite stanza. it reaches out and grabs me in. the flow is so perfect and i sometimes share your view. thank you very much for sharing.
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Amazing write, i love it. The concept is amazing. The flow is great and just seemed to roll. Good luck in this contest.
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Excellent write and rhyme flow. It is easy to hide behind a mask rom this ugly world. Best to you in my contest.
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wow this one is really good missa wat was ur insperation or were u just bored again lol :
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...the second one...lol!
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lol lmao
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