There is a darkness inside of me waiting to explode.
I do not know how to handle these evil thoughts I endure.
There is this emotion inside of me.
The pain I hide so no one will see.
Am I destined to feel like this for eternity.
A contest entry
- Beauty, Tragedy, Etcetera by MessedupMarionette.
700 points, ended November 17, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angry Anyone?? by A-Daisy-Among-Roses.
900 points, ended December 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I feel like this is the beginning of the poem, rather than the entire thing. It seems more in the conceptual stage than completed. I think the feeling is a good one to go on, and one that can inspire some interesting work, but I don't feel like you put quite enough thought into this poem. Maybe if you look at the poem from a stylistic point of view and decide how you want it to visually read, and how to use the visual appearance of the poem to convey the message as well...
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