Your words
closed in on my head,
crushing my skull
til my eyes popped and
were carried in the slow flow
of a viscous liquid malignancy
spewing from my mind.
I just need to feel something - anything...
So I pick
at the festering scabs
clinging to my decomposing heart,
so that I can feel the pain
of losing you
all over again.
In a list
A contest entry
- Heartbreak Hotel by neenz.
900 points, ended November 10, 2008, 34 entries
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wow you took me to an all new emotional level
very deep words
good luck in the contest
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Awesome!
This is just TOO deep! I am awed by the work put into this effort. THANKS AGAIN!!
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Good
A well writen peace
good use of words to, i loved reading it
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You are up mighty late, hmmm? Can't sleep? maybe you didna log out. I have something similar I'd like to bring you to read, and my newest "halfway" you might enjoy. Does this count as dirty-pretty? The images are absolutely overwhelming. I have to turn away...
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Such a sad piece here, a heart can feel like it is failing when love disappears. I hope you find your Mr. Right.
c
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This is a heart wrenching poem, very well penned.
Be well
Slayer
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Nothing like scratching old itches, is there? Lol.
Seriously though, this is powerful in its depiction of emotional pain and the trauma of failed love. Also, very well-written.
Bill
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Wow, this line "so that I can feel the pain
of losing you all over again" - I don't think I could take it. Thank you for the entry!
-N
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