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Let Battle Commence

Out in the garden,
on a snow covered night.
when the stars were all twinkly,
and the moonbeams shone bright.

As the noise of the day,
disapeared by the minute.
The garden at peace,
you're the only one in it.

The silence so loud,
that it deafened your ear's.

Peace that surrounded you,
dispelled your fears.

Then suddenly it happened,
quite out of the blue.
A flippin great snowball,
was heading for you.

It's had your name on it,
there's one thing for sure.
It was coming your way,
from the garden next door.

There was no use in running,
you must make a stand.
If it's war they were after,
assume the command.

Finding it's target,
the snowball connects.
With the side of your head,
leaving you quite perplexed.

Speed's of the essence,
if you're to survive.
The onslaught of snowballs,
now coming in five's.

With all you have in you,
you're hurling them back.
The approach that you've chosen,
"full frontal attack".

The missiles were flying,
from your garden to theirs.
It was getting quite serious,
they'd joined up in pairs.

As battle cries raged,
midst the laughter and fun.
Each garden resembled ,
"The battle of the somme".

Deep silence was shattered,
that cold winter's night.
When the neighbors next door,
staged a great snowball fight.

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  • This is an awesome poem. Reminds me of the snowball fight my sisters' husband started when we went to Virginia in 2004. We were at "Big Meadows" out of no where the snowballs started flying. LOL Good memories!!! I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 16
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    a lovley take

    well done , congratulations on the silver shiny thing


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 17, 2008

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    This is realy good I love good rhyming poetry.
    I could just feel the chill of a cold freezing night.I could almost feel the snowball that hit you in the head as I think of how many times that has happened to me.
    Thank you for the memories and Thank you for your entry good luck in the contest.
    ED.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Sounds like fun, fun, fun!!!

    This is a great poem, reminding me of those delightful visions of the winters at home as a kid when I lived in Michigan, where I grew up. We had the best fun, snowball fights, making angels in the snow, building snowmen and snow forts, and of course eating icicles when Mom wasn't around to stop us(!!) Thank you for the memories, you've lightened my heart and made my day shine with a wintry glow!! Have a great day, Mal!! Peace, love & hugs to ya!!


    • Sunshine Always
      November 3, 2008
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      Glad you enjoyed this one Cyn. Everyone seems to love a good snowball fight , don't they....Slan...mal


  • humblpye gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    Wow!

    Some neighberhood..lol sound like a jolly lot to be sure...lol I can just imagine it!
    anyway, it's a lot safer than fireworks!
    Ajolly good rollicking lyrical rhyme Mal

    John


    • Sunshine Always
      October 31, 2008
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      Thank you John, glad you enjoyed this one...and your right of course,much safer than fireworks.....mal


  • Jesann gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    Great imagery...I feel like I could join in.
    Sounds like you had a lot of fun!!!
    Wonderful happy write.

    • Sunshine Always
      October 31, 2008
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      Snowball fights are brilliant arn't they "J"..I love em...Thanks for dropping in again...I'll get some eggnogg in for Chrissy...take care...mal.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    its a long time since i enjoyed a snowball fight,,,excellent mal....it seems as though you enjoyed one yesterday ,


    • Sunshine Always
      October 31, 2008
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      Sorry Pete, no snow here yet, but the memories are still fresh....Nice to see you...(To see you nice)...mal


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Really fun and for me, quite nostalgic. We have children on both sides of our house, AND we have the only "hill" for sliding. In addition, on one side the father clears a large area on the lake so his children can play ice hockey, with goals, a lighted puck, and overhead lights so they can play after school. (It gets dark here really early in the winter -- but I suppose it is the same for you.) It often feels like we look out on a painting by Norman Rockwell! Loved the images, loved the background. So fun, I just enjoyed this very much. Great rhymes and wonderful flow. A great read as always.

    • Sunshine Always
      October 31, 2008
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      Hi "H", Glad you enjoyed this fun piece.It's been a long time since Robin Hood country saw that amount of snow....but there's fun in remembering isn't there. Sounds beautiful where you live..Have fun this winter...mal


  • Legend silver member
    October 30, 2008

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    Excellent Mal i was really caught up in this one So much so that i have now got hot aches Great story, rhyme and flow A most enjoyable read
    Vunderbar

    • Sunshine Always
      October 30, 2008
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      "Hot aches"...I'll let you into a little secret ...rub Algepan on your hands before you start...Works a treat Lol. Have edited the typo Legend ,many thanks for stopping by and for putting my awful spelling to rights...(still not learned how to use this spellcheck since they changed it around) Bless you...mal

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