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Rain Dance

Blackfeet
drum beaters
Beaded Moccasins
whirl

Medicine Man
In wolf's skin
Rattles around fire

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a new form for me.. But I'll give it a try.
Thanks.

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 22, 2008
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    Thank for your entry

    I like it. One of my ex's is blackfeet. I like the picture this paints. Especially in the second stanza. I can see him moving around the fire now.

    The form was done well. You followed the word and line count and the imagery was very present. Good flow and structure.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • Mirthryl
    November 5, 2008

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    Very nice imagery in your limited words. The "fire" makes a nighttime setting come to mind, and the drum, rattles and dancing complete the picture

  • davidwright silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    A nice effort. Native American traditions are alive and well in spite of our best efforts to stamp them out along with examples o great pageantry. Happy trails.