London

An orphan in the workhouse,
Oliver Twist steals
Did he take?

A locket of his mother
along with the ring
Was he sent?

Away from the farm branded
as troublemaker
Or chosen?

Hooked up with Charley Bates all
after gruel treatment
Did he work?

After a robbery took
place in London
Or did it?

Along some boys on the run
branded as a thief
Did he steal?

He learns to pickpocket ones.
Which handkerchiefs art
Did he learn?

Author notes

Quinzaine form:

1. The first line has seven syllables
2. The second line has five syllables but is the beginning of a question
3.The third line has three syllables and is the end of the question.

A contest entry

Poetic Form: Quinzaine - Prompt - Oliver Twist Word Bank by Little Eagle. 700 points, ended November 21, 2008, 6 entries
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Little Eagle
November 21, 2008

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Thank you for your entry
Good try in doing a quinzaine chain. First let me say, this had a very halted feel for me. I doesn't seem that this type of form lends itself well to a chain. But I impressed that you attempted it.

As for the form, according to the description, both the second and third lines ask questions, not a beginning and end to a question. Even if there is more than one description, your second lines were not the beginning of a question, they often were the continuation of the first line which was a statement.

Thank you for trying. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

God Bless
Tammy