There is an angel, on green hills strollin',
searchin' high and low for the peaceful things
promised her by the old brass bell's tollin'.
The sun about her head, shinnin' like gold rings,
replacin' that halo lost with her wings
to one who thought angels were made for controllin'.
So, amongst mere mortals she now goes strollin',
searchin' for peace in the brass bell's tollin'.
This earth in its oft' etherial glory
brings calm to her lone solemn wanderin'
inspirin' hopeful turns in her story,
a new path revealin' to end wonderin'.
This one is an angel whose heart still sings
though some cruelly tried to crush her wings.
Author notes
Thinking over a conversation with a friend...a couple years worth of conversations really.
The cadence was off a wee bit so I've done a bit of editin'. I think it is improving, but as always suggestions are most certainly welsome. 
Please tell me what you think
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Oh, this is splendid--and can't believe I didn't see it before! It has wonderful dilect throughout! A different sort of sonnet! Loved it! Bravo!
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Thank you
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Beautiful. So many angels really do walk amongst us! It shows us how even if we are beaten down, we don't have to be angry, or sad, but just get up and search for peace... I love how you write "searchin' for peace in the brass bell's tollin'..." Lovely piece, great moral. Wonderful job!
Just a few mistakes in punctuation and spelling. Line 3, should be bells instead of bell's, and line 4, shinin' instead of shinnin'.
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Well darlin', thank you for the kind comments. I do so very much appreciate it. Thank you too for catching the typo on "shinnin'", but as for "bell's" that's what I meant as it was supposed to be possessive, i.e. the tollin' of the bell, the bell's tollin'. Really do appreciate all the feedback.
, Dannie
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I really liked this poem. Really really. I'm a huge fan of angels used in poetry, in a nonChristian sense, and this one was amazing. Great write.
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Well Miss, I'm pleased that you enjoyed the piece and the writin', but gracious if the Christian underpennin' wasn't clear I've done somethin' wrong...the bell's tollin' is meant to allude to the bell that calls one and all to Mass where peace can be had and clarity found. Thanks for the feedback., Dannie
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Well-crafted write, creative in many ways...one can hear church bells as one reads or sings this piece. Great job
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Thank you...the sentiment of this piece was a long time a comin'; a mornin' of pensiveness served to bring it about. Many thanks for the generous comments.
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