I’d like to be you for a day,
know what you feel, say what you say.
We could trade places and our faces.
Live the lives that seem to make us.
I’d have a feeling you’d be reeling
over the things I believe I’m seeing,
As I would you; the joys, the blues.
Make the choices that you choose.
I think I see things so clear,
that I forget my windows are smeared.
I bet you often feel just as sure,
led to believe your views are pure.
I wish I was much like you,
and see all as you do.
I wish you were just like me
and see now as I see.
The trials we face are common to each other,
temptations we know are their brothers.
We both wonder what life has brought,
seems we’re cut from the same ol’ cloth..
Yet you’re still there, while I’m here,
feeling our tears, as well our cheers.
We speak of things so very starkly,
of what we see in a mirror darkly.
Maybe I need an eye transplant,
from the Doctor, heaven-sent.
Not for my head, but my heart;
would what I’d see tear me apart?!
Still you’re there, while I’m here,
so far apart, even though so near.
Fixed like two islands in stormy seas.
The storm drowns out our drastic pleas.
A Day is coming, when storms now thronging
give way to the noise of praise.
We’ll know of things we’ve been longing,
as He knows us with our days.
© 10-30-08
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very nice rhythm and flow! it reminds me of that song Give Me Your Eyes (think it's by Brandon Heath). If only we could see the world the way He does. Excellently written!
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I know the song and like it very much. I'm sure the Lord influenced me with that. Brandon's song spoke much to me and my need to grow in like manner.
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Our God is an Awesome God! (i <3 the song too)
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From the start it grabbed hold of me.... You made it very personal and to the point in sucha good way.
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i love this poem. it speaks to everyone. it touched my heart. you speak so true and from your soul. we all wish we could trade lives or see what the other person sees.
'I wish I was much like you,
And see all as you do.
I wish you were just like me
And see now as I see.'
thank you for this excellent write. thank you for sharing your talent. you are an amazing writer! God bless you always
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Great write, we often wonder what it would be like to trade places with someone else. Some to take their pain away and others to wee what they see.
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I don't think you know where the door is.
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Are you talking about the cloth we're cut from?
Are you suggesting I'm from the back flap (door), like we're cut from old-fashioned long johns?
Well...it may explain a few things for me.
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Oh, m'gosh! I have felt this way since I was a child!
You've well described the feeling of being 'inside' oneself, and wondering " How could that person be there, and unknowing of what I am about." Hard to describe. You place it in an excellent role play.
The embodiment and content is so 'familial' that I am very reluctant to critique.
. Can you believe? It happens.
I love it. Just love it. Looks like we are from the same piece of cloth. Long as it isn't 'itchy', I'll wear it.
Terrific.
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I don't buy much in critiques/reviews anyway.
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So true most of us just want to know what the other is feeling. We live our daily lives going around as if all is good in the world and yet on the inside we are hurting. We put up a mask to hide our hurt and yet we don't let anyone in. We need to share some of what is hurting us to those we love and trust and just find someone to confide in. We all need someone and yet a very small percentage of us are even able to confide we others. Just share and be glad that you have people to share with the are those that are lonly lonly people that have nobody to tell anything too and if they do they don't just love and be love that's all that matters and that you are able to love and trust and share with those that are with you. This is a beautiful poem, very great work of art.
God Bless
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So true most of us just want to know what the other is feeling
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Thanks, GW!
God bless!
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Yes, He does!Let's praise Him, while we have breath!
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I love this poem. It speak to everyone. We all wish we could trade lives or see what the other person see. It moved me through my heart. You speak so true and speak from your soul. Well job bro.
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It takes a lot for someone to even realize that their view isn't perfect.
I have often wanted to change places with someone, just for understanding. Especially when they're facing a problem and I see a solution. I want to see why they don't. See if my solution has already crossed their minds and why they might have thrown it out? See if there is more going on that I realize.
your poem makes me think of that, and that's wonderful.
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Nicely said...thank you!
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Bravo!
Yes, it takes one to know one as 'they' say! Love this write. Practicing the Royal Law can get sticky, especially when we are myopic! Great flow with this, timing & rhyming as I always expect from you Bob! This is 
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If I did that with you, would I be wearing that hat?
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It's a Great Sun Hat!
Hey...in your neck of the woods it'd be a great thing & it might look rather fetching on you! 
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I think; if we were able to walk in another's shoes, maybe just for a few hours... we'd see how blessed we each really are and how maybe... just maybe, things in our lives just aren't as bad as we think they are...
A very nice poem Bob, the flow is good, rhymes are good as well.
God bless you...
~Melissa
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I know I'd like to be you.
God bless you as well.
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i am so inspired. i am so glad i took the time to read this, ualways amaze me with your writes. i feel good, i feel some kind of hope. omg, i love your talent. much love and respect
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Humbled, I am...
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Your words sing with their usual beauty. I am so looking forward to that Day of Praise. Wonderful write.
Sam
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