windows,
solid playing liquid,
drip slowly,
flowing downward.
my tattered nation seen thus --
inveterate invertebrates
shambling mindlessly toward shining traps,
precious bio-survival tickets
clutched fiercely close.
impatience shakes unsteady foundations,
tossing convictions left, right, everywhere
before frothing needful fangs.
impulse feeds, growing strong,
pressing ever-harder
against disciplined bondage.
moldy seeds never grow.
ivory does not come from bones.
purchased crowns cannot win thrones.
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Comments
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You have a very impressive vocabulary. I had to look up "inveterate."
The last three lines were wonderful. Packed with truth and layers of meaning.
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A strong last stanza rounded off a very profound poem! I like this write! good one, and good luck in the contest!
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Love the last three lines. So appropriate for next week's election!
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I was thinking of the energy and economic crises more than the election itself, but there's definitely some bearing there, too, as whoever wins, regardless of who it is, may or may not heed the warning. I used to be a big McCain fan, but watching him throw away every ounce of integrity to win has been extremely painful and disheartening. I would have voted for him in 2000, if he'd won the nomination then, maybe... but not now. And Obama comes across to me as a Kennedy wannabe in many ways. His slogans are a bit too... pat. I can tell he's a good person, but good people are perfectly capable of making bad decisions, perfectly capable of succumbing to bad impulses. Witness McCain.
I can't even comment on Cruella DePalin. When I heard she had been chosen I thought it was a Daily Show/Bad Reporter joke or something. I don't dislike Biden, but, again, see commentary about good people and bad ideas/decisions/impulses.
Thank you.
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Most agreed on all points. I can only hope that there is some salvation that my eyes are not privy to. I've never been much of a praying person but I am frightened, for the first time in my life, for my country and my fellow man. I am worried that either candidate is going to have his hands full with so many issues, all important to this country's survival, that something is bound to fall into the cracks. I was recently laid off due to economic downsizing and the financial crisis so I am personally invested in the decisions made in that regard but on the other hand, I recognize that all politicians are simply human beings. Not the gods some of them wish they were.
In any case, I found this piece to be very insightful & smartly written. And am pleased to know that you are opinionated & strong enough to state your thoughts. Bravo! -
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Sorry to hear that. Though it's not an uncommon story these days. I'm disabled myself, struggling to find something I can do. And my partner is healthy but young and has only some college, like me -- so he hasn't been able to find a job better than "weekend sign-holder". And while he does the work of a caretaker for me, it's been very difficult to actually get that acknowledged, and the time they pay for is teeny. I'd probably be healthy enough to work by now, in all honesty, but I haven't been able to get the health services I need to heal because I don't have the money because I can't work! It's been very frustrating. I've finally got things sort of tied together now, at least enough to make concrete advances in my healing, but it's been *such* slow, hard going, ridiculously so. To think that people whose illnesses are potentially fatal, unlike mine, are going through the same thing, appalls me.
The worst thing about politicians -- or rather, about our way of doing politics -- is that we've created a system in which the skills/qualities needed to win are not, and in many cases actually are opposed to, those needed to acquit the job well. That's why Obama/Biden isn't a total comfort to me. I'll be voting for him, mind, and I hope he wins, but I'm not going to relax until his first term is over, at least, and his second if any. I liked Clinton a lot, too, but even his record is far from flawless.
Thank you again. I don't always... usually only when I feel like someone might be listening. If no one's listening it's just a waste of my time and theirs, you know?
I hope things work out for you.
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I have the strongest faith that things will work out. I'm mostly healthy & in love and don't have the worst case scenario by a stretch. I'm sorry to hear you've had such a rough road but never give up. If you have a partner that loves you, take a level of comfort from that. The politics will work itself out (I hope) and people like us will find our way in the dark, if necessary. Strength of character will create the path for us to take.
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I'm 23 and he's my first. I still feel vaguely as if I'm in someone else's fiction.
But it helps a whole lot.
All we've got to remember is that reality is data. Physically, we are made of information. As our thoughts and feelings, therefore, are also made of information, logically speaking, our intentions and will therefore create reality. Or can, at least, if we put enough energy into it and really believe it.
Good luck.
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