as she reaches across
the old table
with its splinters
a warmth crosses her
and the deep veins in his hand
resonate though her
his small smile
appears and she smiles
back
with a cup of coffee;
steam spewing onto her face
almost scalding her
destiny landed her here
but as she discovered more and more
about the stranger,
she wanted more and more
to be with him
under shiny stars
and hot cups of coffee
with a heavy dose of
caffeine keeping them awake
to chase their sorrows away
Author notes
~ coffee stains that tell stories 
Amaranthine Lover
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A contest entry
- Phrases :) by Beauty Of Silence.
800 points, ended November 13, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From October 2008 by amaranthine lover.
1550 points, ended November 22, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really think you did well in illustrating this.
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I loved it! It was really comforting and peacful.
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wow. aparna!!! this is beautiful. amazing lines. you weave such a great poem with imagery and lovely lines and oooh this part:
destiny landed her here
but as she discovered more and more
about the stranger,
she wanted more and more
to be with him
sounds like she got lost, and went to a strangers hoouse and he was there...or she was stranded in a train station...oooh so nice!!
love it love it love it.
like so many of your pieces you tell a story that just chills you and makes you think of the sweetest things...lol now i cant help being all loveydovey love this piece, it is perfect!! and you so deserve to win!!
you, wee and ranji are really good poets you know that??
and by the way i love how you took the prompt to such a place, and stretched and weaved it into thsi piece of loveliness!
i love it girl
and it is amazing how in the end you dont mention the phrase at all, or even a prt of the phrase- but the reader knows it all from the starting lines.
perfect
much love
checkmate
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APARNA!!! i knew it was you once i saw the word "caffeine". you got fascinated about it yesterday... so yeap, that tells alot. hahas.
i like this poem very much coz whenever i read your poems, it gives me the tingles and a warm soothing feeling on the inside of me. and they both happen at the same time, freaky or WHAT? anyhoo... like all your poems, this gave me the warm feelings, and we're talking about coffee here. your words are so gentle and calm (unlike you) and you definitely ended this poem in such a brilliant way. tho one part scared me beyond words:
"steam spewing onto her face
almost scalding her"
noooow do you know why i hate coffee and fear fire? goshies. anyhoo, thanks for the entry and best wishes!
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