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loss of time

youth expended before the hush
of silver becomes accepted and
cry's I lost my time 

Author notes

prompt:
quotation "I wasted time, now times doth waste me." William Shakespeare
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carole21

15 words

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  • crimsondew
    November 26, 2008
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    beautiful in expression and brevity! congrats on gold!


  • Between My Ears
    November 2, 2008

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    I like reading poems that leave me thinking and needing to read them one more time. This one did th at, great write. Really powerful words and imagery here, good luck in the contest.

  • copper29
    October 30, 2008

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    Nice imagery. Just one thing- it should be "cries," not "crys" in the last line. Other than that, great job. Best of luck to you in the contest!

    • carole21
      October 31, 2008
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      thanks

      appreciate the comments . . fixed it with cry's instead . . !!


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    Something to ponder. Good write.

  • davidwright silver member
    October 30, 2008

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    Very interesting. I preume this refers to death before ones time. Good luck in the contest and happy trails

  • Crescitvirtus
    October 30, 2008
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    As the poem goes 'Gather ye rosebuds while ye may'. One of my favourites.


  • Three Doves
    October 30, 2008

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    Great Write! Well chosen thoughts on your chosen prompt. Best wishes in life and the contest.
    Peace in light and love
    Noah

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