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daydreams at dawn

Clouded breath commingles with
Smoke suspended in
Morning bright air

Squalor- the sounds thereof
Assult the ear, and thus the mind
Whirls and reels:

Painting wires with spiraling ivy
Coating icy sidewalks in wheatgrass
Dreaming of springtime and
Summer homes

A contest entry

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    What wonderful imagery you painted in this piece, I got lost in the soft beauty. Best to you in the contest