tassel-toned moves drip slowly –
a measure of sunlight's residue
an exploration of consequential drizzle
opium stains on a lover's left neck
detected somewhere in a lusty fleck
of pearl posturing, lies beneath
a trickling chant of love drops
to the hungry they are bread and oil
to those who thirst, cool streams,
lilies and dew – the tears of dusk flowers
the sun ferments in flame-leafed sadness
in this season of release
gazing between fractures of phrase
only to slip deeper into nuance
Love Drops
©Balldinger/crisstiena
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Author notes
Image: Heart Splash ~ unknown photographer
COLLAB. with Balldinger
In a list
A contest entry
- Collabs Here by Age of Rain.
1000 points, ended November 8, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This one is another crazy quilt of ideas. For me, it is not up to a cohesive whole. I like the descriptions individually, but they don't string together in my mind for some reason. Ah well. One can't love them all... ~wink~
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Ah...the scales are lifted...it's a collaboration. That explains some things. ~smile~
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Mhm! My interest was piqued by your first line and that feeling never really went away. This said as much as it needed to and had a strong presentation value as well. I liked the pick, background, font choice, and, well, everything else. Short comment, but a good one I think. Well done.
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I love that picture of the golden heart; I have it myself. I emailed you two others of hearts I imagine you'll like, my Friend. 
This is a profoundly moving & obviously intuitive collaboration, a dance between shorelines, a turning of tides, a dip between light & shadow as the moon ascends & declares the night to be hers. A winding, twisting tale of fiery devotion. Brava & Bravo, Scribes. I wish you good fortune in the contest. 
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ethereal precission...
wow - whoever inspired this deserves kiss embers and heart-shaped love drops. i can think of nowhere else i've ever been the last 3 minutes that would make me leave here in a hurry, but thoughts of where to go in the future are certainly motivational when reading this aloud.
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Who inspired this? You did, you dork... It's even got your name at the bottom...
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that was me?!? what the....?!!! like i said I can think of nowhere i've been the last 3 years...
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The language is very richly-layered you two. Definitely one to read out-loud. Nice work.
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