i sweep
the dust off my eyes
the soot off my smile
there's a brighter day
somewhere in my life
some when that i won't
close my eyes to forget
a day when my smile will
play like music on a flute
so i clear the clouds on
my sun.
so i take another clumsy
step.
i know i would fall
but this time i'll get up
because life's something
worth fighting for.
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aaa! this has so much meaning to it, anyone who does not see it, well... (:
you have amazing talent, and i hope you never stop writing. -
love the positive outlook of your thoughts with this, yes it's only a matter of baby steps
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I am so sad i missed this one... I am so BAD for not catching up!!!
This is a very hopeful piece; despite the ups and downs - there is beauty to be held. I have been rubbed thin in this life - dragged, bruised, and beaten down, as have we all to some extent ... The metaphor of that is to say, who says it can't make you that much stronger?
Nice imagery throughout dear & well spoken!
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wow
inspiring positivity
very well worded
not sentimental or fake
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beautiful as always hon.
i have to say that this poem personally related to me.
sometimes i come back from school, wondering if life's worth living anymore.
friends, CCA, family. problems everywhere. even past memories haunt my thoughts and i feel so depressed and guilty.
but i guess no one can escape these feelings. that's why i love this poem.
"i sweep
the dust off my eyes
the soot off my smile"
that's what i wanna do whenever i'm down in the dumps.
it is really something worth learning from you
glad to have such a strong friend like you.
and now we have to pray for Ranji's operation.
she's equally tough. i know she'll make a speedy, full recovery (:
brilliant write
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aw hon no matter how out and over and depressed you feel, do be glad ranji, me and aparna are all here to love you and your familys there too and chocolate and vanilla 
theres loads of stuff to be glad for dont you think?
and you are strong too wee. for one, you can stand up for your beliefs and you are always so sensible but theres a touch if craziness about you and hey you are happy all the time- yes you need strength and loads and oodles of it you know
i hope ranji will be all right, but i know she would be. she is the strongest. she will be okay. these things, you know.
love you oodles
charu
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beautiful. and true.
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aww yes indeed it does. just be like me, bite everyone that comes in the way or tries to ruin your life! my fangs come in handy u know hahas. anyhoo, life is worth fighting for. and save every moment of it, coz you'll never know when its gonna end. omgosh charu, i sound so morbid!!! oh lord, but anyhoo... that is the truth. love ya hon... and remember, u can either bite them, OR break their nose (never tried that one before, maybe i should!!!)
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well said!
I loved this poem and the deeper meaning and imagery.
this sort of described you today and how you were a little weird but well like you said, life is worth fighting for.
I love the hope too and how it clings on and doesn't let go, just like hope itself. best of luck in everything you do and you have a great smile!
loveees,
transit~
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