Come fuck me with your brilliance.
Put your verbiage deep in me.
I want to lick up every drop
of your verbosity.
You are my master orator -
Verbatim or baitee?
No matter what
your native tongue
has touched new depths in me.
Your talents for expressing
perspectives aptly placed
I‘m savoring your nectar
and shudder from the waste
a lifetime spent so uninformed
sensations once unknown.
I marvel at your genius
And how, aesthetically, you’ve grown.
Here, whispered into open ears
There, splashed across the page.
Crescendoing acoustics
As your words take center stage.
I can’t say I'm sated.
My thirst continues on.
But I certainly am well nourished
By this heady denouement.
Author notes
For me, nothing beats writing that combines all our passions.
And in this I tried to capture the heat created when learning, loving and laughing all play together and when words, turned on their sides, say more.
On a more personal note, I guess I'm coming out of the closet to say, nothing gets me hotter than a brilliant mind.
Written January 30th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- The One Thing You Most Love Writing About by dp robertson.
350 points, ended January 31, 2004, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "MEMBERS OF HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY" No. 12 by huguenauties.
750 points, ended May 30, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A huge turn on
Intelligence, creativity in genius form is such a turn on to me as well..come fuck me with your brilliance so that i can in turn fuck your brains out
I'm with you on this one ..totally agree,
Loved this,
galfalfa
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The first line caused me to sit with mouth agape. I am surely glad that my ears are not timid, and not only have I heard profanity but have used it when I felt it necessary. This is poignant and written with an exceedingly high caliber of talent. "genius" has so very many levels. This is the first time I've read its sexual side. LOL BRILLIANT! I wish you well in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Dear Renee,
Your comment lifts my heart as it so clearly carries the uniqueness of you! You are bold and defiant when need be and kind and perceptive in your interactions and work. I'm honored to have you visit my work and see it so clearly. Thank you!
hugs,
Jane
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Thank you for taking the time to enter. We appreciate your talents. Best of luck to you
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AnnD
a purr to you too.
Jane
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In my mind, this reads brilliantly! That first line was like a splash of ice cold water after reading some of the other entries in this contest. It really woke me up! (Not to imply the other entries were putting me to sleep.
) I like the blending of all those elements you mention in your author notes. I'm so glad to have had the opportunity to read this poem and wish you good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
~J.
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Trista
I did feel a bit like a fish out of water when I read the other entries so your comment again makes me feel at home. Thank you so much.
Jane
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A fantastic poem you have written Jane. I enjoyed reading it.
Hine.
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Well, it looks like genius can be sexy, too I love the way you've interwoven both the physical and thoughtful sides of poetic prowess into this delightful poem, making them seem as one as though one has inspired the other.
Lol.. and your author comment only adds to this superb piece. Love it
Good luck in he contest
Dee
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Dee, Thank you for allowing my twisted mind to make sense to someone other than me.
I'm not quite sure why this holds such a high place on my list of works in my mind other than that it seems to blend all my passions into one.
It does stand out a bit though among the reverential, and historical pieces here, does it not? Kind of like that black sheep of the family, eh?
Jane
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Very good Jane. Enjoyed reading it.
Jen.
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That was tasty! You have a lot of spice in your ideas. Best of luck!
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I enjoyed your poem very much! Very nicely done! Good Luck in the contest!
Maureen
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Dear Jane, A great choice to enter in our group contest.
Love Joan
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Dear Jane,
I am deeply touched that you responded to my call and have entered this poem in our twelfth contest.
As I have frequently told you, I consider this to be the best of many brilliant poems that have poured from your pen and is an excellent exemplar of your verbal mastery.
If, with my simple kiwi comprehension, I ever found some of your writings skilfully obscure, that is my failing - not yours.
With this poem I had no such difficulty and, after more that three years of re-reading, I find it no less awe-inspiring and admirable than I did on first acquaintance.
Thankyou for entering it. Good luck with the voting.
Applause, Love and hugs, XXX Hugh R.
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Hugh,
Your kindest of reminders keeps this new to me. With each dusting I simultaneously experience it from the outside and from the giddiness as I wrote it.
For this I sincerely thank you!!
Jane
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Promise ... sing
Should words take centre stage ? Imagine if you thought in pictograms ? -
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Twist my mind...
I love comments that make me think... and this one did and does.
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WOW!! Though you always . . . ok, impress is nowhere near enough word so: you blow me away! Your style and pace and everything is of course perfect. But also fine is the image -- genius sought by brilliance. I share that need for contact with a 'Mind'. Thanks for this, j. It made my day, but then you generally do.
Edited on Aug 17, 3:07 p.m. because ''. -
I'm almost afraid to post a comment on this write for fear of looking like a dolt. All I know is that I throughly enjoyed every brilliant line. It's one of those delicious pieces that you just want to suck on it for a while...lol
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LOL -- no guy in their right mind on this site could not be moved by the combination of poem and author notes. Poetry is all about effect. Even T.S Eliot, who often had me reading his poems to figure out what the hell he was writing, understood this critical point. This poem captures all that importance - and twists it at the same time into sexual humor. That is brilliant -- for that not only combines effect and content, but in the long run also manages to make the whole effort enjoyable
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Tess,
I can see your take on the use of the word perspective. In my mind, it represented the changing views that come from eyes that look at something from a slightly different angle than our own. It awakens something in me every time I read something that truly shows me a new way of looking. -
This reminded me of one of the first poems I ever read by Charles Bukowski:
i met a genius
i met a genius on the train
today
about 6 years old,
he sat beside me
and as the train
ran down along the coast
we came to the ocean
and we both looked out the window
at the ocean
and then he looked at me
and said'
"it's not pretty."
it was the first time i'd
realized
that.
I really like the way the poem is laid out, but it seems to me to be describing a painting more than a poem (sustained metaphor I know... just saying) for instance I don't really see how a poem can have perspective (like you use it)?
Overall I really like the poem though, so well written!
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your word usage was amazing. snaps for you.
the imagry in this piece made me tingly in ways i don't understand. excellent job. -
here i am again .. rummaging through bookmarks .. i do love this ..opening line is just killer ..
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haha i hit the return the favor button ...it brought me here ..and i remembered reading this but glad i did again ..matter of fact ..i forgot how much i liked it...so i'm bookmarking it for future use...morning! lisa
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THIS ROCKS! I so totally love it. Thanks for pointing me in the right direction. And I completely concur on the brilliant mind...we are sisters.
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I third the motion...I had to laugh at the "wasted" line..nothing wasted here...Some real winning lines, I'm almost jealous...lol...gonna go turn on the fan...
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I think Hugh Wyles is close to the truth - it is a truly remarkable work. I wish my mind could have taken this path at least once, instead of just being jealous of not writing the poem.
You've had all the praise for the obvious lines but I found myself drawn to the second line: "Put your verbiage deep in me" - 1. I found it the most physical of lines and 2. the concept of 'verbiage' - everything, all the extra words. Powerhouse line of the poem! Excellent!
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inspiring
Your piece is fresh and witty, especially the lines:
"I want to lick up every drop
Of your verbosity"
Very inspiring, I think I can somehow call it my experience as well.
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Excellent
Well done. The first lines were my favourite. Such an open, forcefull, forward and, I must say, poetic few lines. A brilliant piece. -
Dear Jane,
I malign nobody. "Genius" (def): "an extraordinary endowment of intellectual, imaginative, expressive or inventive faculty."
Cassell's Dictionary, p.485. (Revised Edition).
This poem, in my opinion, illustrates a talent exactly befitting the above definition. I rest my case. Love and Hugs, XXX Hugh. -
wonderful write! i marvel at your vocabulary skills! beautiful words, beautiful flow. good luck in the contest, not that you need it. enjoyed reading your piece, great write. thanks for sharing.
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Whoo, that was hot. Seriously hot, made me feel all uncomfortable. I liekd it, an excellent use of Eros, and tactile imagery.
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this is awesome. i almost freaked out at the first line because one thing that my best friend and i always say is "i want somebody to fuck my mind!" i think i'm gonna have to email her your poem! but aside from that, i liked the subject matter and imagery... the rhyming was nice; i like the every other line rhyme. then it doesn't get too sing-songy. great write. i enjoyed it.
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i love the concept behind this...it paints the image of making love to intellect...there is nothing more beautiful than that...excellent write
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Yeah...this was a good poem I suppose, I wrote a poem like this one time a long time ago, so yeah it was nifty, good poem Yeah and keep up the good work
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Yeah...this was a good poem I suppose, I wrote a poem like this one time a long time ago, so yeah it was nifty, good poem
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Hugh,
Your continued support and kind words are what dreams are made of. But to put me in the category of a genius is to malign those who truly are. That being said, I humbly thank you for your sincerity and your praise. What more could a poet ask for?
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Brilliantissimo!!
Dear Jane,
Repeated reading of this in no way dulls the senses.
This HAS to be one of the most brilliant and witty poems ever penned to this site.
"I marvel at your genius
and how, aesthetically, you've grown"
I can do no better than apply your own words
to your inspired self.
Love and Hugs, XXX Hugh.
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Dear Reader,
Now THERE's a critique worth framing.
Respectfully,
Writer
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Orgasmic prose from head to toes, a litany of lust,
The thrust of your bold entry, really is a must,
I hope your inspiration, doesn’t D.P. overtax,
And the writer and the reader enjoy a joint climax!
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Fabulous! I love it - its so fabulously unique - the discriptions are dead on and very vivid and the rhyme and meter are very near perfect!!!
Wonderful write!!!
thanks for sharing it!!!!
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Vibrating
As I age I find the mind to be the most interesting part of a partner...soon I suppose it will be her social security check.
This exceptionally well done - witty and smart with vibrating verbiage. Three cheers! -
Interesting... You've taken what could very easily be a "tasteless" topic, and made it completely appropriate with your knowledge of vocabulary, and I have a high amount of respect for those that can do that... Of this whole poem that struck me most intriguing was the unrelennting use of your knowledgable words.. congratulations, and I'll be waitng to see more more
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Some very very cool word play in here, I really liked it. 'aesthetically you've grown' ..that sticks with me well. The image it created hehe (you don't want to know) was very interesting. I like the vocab of this too, and the beat was great
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You're welcome!! ( she grins some more )
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Whims,
hmmmmmmmmmmmmm, hadn't ever considered that possibility before. Interesting. Glad I don't have to worry though, unless I end up in some unforeseen threesome!
Thanks for thinking of me and sharing your always distinct perspective.
grinning from here to here
Jane -
Genius to genius I've heard it said,
might not partner up well in bed,
'cause ego to ego both well know,
which way they want a thing to go.
So if two directions cooled steam
it might all wind up one wet dream.
Interesting write...there is nothing I like better than a brilliant mind .. grin..
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This is great and certainly gained my attention from the first line. Like you I almost look beyond the words and try and imagine the person behind them. With some of the poets at AP that ofcourse means a huge sigh of relief that the distance of cyberspace protects me, as some people are clearly bent and insane. This is a great piece of writing and pays homage to a facet that many of those at AP are in love with – sheer brilliance! This is a great poem and thank you for entering seems the right thing to say considering the first two lines.
David
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When mind and body entwine as one
A wonderful creation is born~
But a body without a mind
Is just an empty shell~
This is well wrote
Smiles~Emma
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wow, very nice! i hear ya, the mind goes so much farther than the body in the end. very well done.
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Irene,
Your hugs and roses touch me as I know this is not quite your cup of tea but it is most satisfying to read your thoughts and feel your unconditional caring. Quite a momma you must be!!!!
Hugs back to you, dear lady.
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What is left to say that could be brilliant after Hugh's outpouring of praise above. He is right about the brilliance though. Your quick mind surely can turn a phrase the way you want it, upside down or sideways. Either way this was great. I enjoyed enough I think it is a winner. Good luck
Irene
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Absolutely, stunningly BRILLIANT!
Dear Jane,
WOW! WOW! WOW! This is just so absolutemento!! Magnifico!! Brillantissimo!! Bellissimo!! ####issimo!! I kissimo your assimo!!
Omar AND his camel are deeply aroused by this effulgent outpouring of your poetic essence. The camel kneels; Omar grovels in the presence of a woman in cyber-heat. Surely, you have melted a huge area of the frozen snow which encircles your lonely domicile! Your usual retiring, private, reticent soul has burst it's fetters and blasted forth in an enunciation of Shakespearian
magnitude. Words fail!! Omar's garments are soaked where he crawls in the molten ice of ecstacy. The camel's knees are engulfed! The applause is deafening!!!!
Succinct, concisely constructed, rhythmically satisfying and explicit with a clarity beyond recall. A forthright boldness of expression that reaches below the waist!! A veritable mistresspiece!! Good luck in the contest - this HAS to be a WINNER!! Love and Hugs in all humility, XXX Hugh. -
Now, Nando - no need to be self-defecating. I understand you display a certain amount of effulgence yourself.
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Shhhhh...do you hear that? It's the sound of thirty million sizzling cyber-nerds simultaneously salivating...
Wait - no, it's not. I just spilled a can of Coke into my computer...that can't be good.
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Beautifully spoken. Beautifully written. Just plain beautiful. Wish I hadn't already voted.
Great write never the less. As always I look forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing your words. Good luck in the contest.
~JayLynn
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You and me both Jane!
This is hot stuff!!
Going for GOOOLLLLLDDDD!
Brilliant!
Kyla
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