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time tested truth

you have broken me time and time again
yet my foolish heart always wants to mend
eager to wait for another day
when you will return to shatter
my dreams of clay

i put you together piece by piece
and yet there is still such disbelief
that you do not recognize the glue
that is squeezed from my heart
that runs so true

for when it was just us one on one
we burned with a passion that shamed the sun
but that ice cold blood running through your veins
froze my flesh long enough to
release your reins

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  • AlittleWrong
    October 30, 2008
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    Wow, i really love this, ESPECIALLY the last stanza. its like the italian stallion powerpunch ending to the fight, but with words. Read ( if you so wish) A Daring Game. i think that you'd find similar feelings and passion. And amazing write. I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!


  • Shimano
    October 30, 2008

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    Beautiful Write

    I reallty enjoyed reading this and may I say I can relate to this write..

    My glue was never strong enough..and I enduring not a broke heart but I shattered heart,

    Your title very catchy...caught me eye

    "i put you together piece by piece
    and yet there is still such disbelief
    that you do not recognize the glue
    that is squeezed from my heart
    that runs so true"

    Your imagery has taken me...and gives the reader such thought...

    thank you for sharing


    • neenz
      October 30, 2008
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      Thank you, that means a lot to me.