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Step too many

Sliding vain slopes,
tangled in web of time,

direction lost in ticking furrows.

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I wasted time, now time doth waste me.
William Shakespeare
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Crimsondew

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  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    Great thoughts Miss talking to you.


  • Between My Ears
    November 2, 2008

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    "tangled in web of time" I absolutely love this phrase you used in the middle of your poem. Great write! Good luck in the contest!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 31, 2008

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    Focus overload, wow, you have said a whole mouthfull here and much more...good luck in the contest lol

  • copper29
    October 30, 2008

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    Amazing word choice. "Vain slopes," "tangled in web of time," and "ticking furrows" are absolutely brilliant. Excellent job! Best of luck.

  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Excellent


  • Three Doves
    October 30, 2008

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    Great Write!!!
    Paying the consequences of our youth in adulthood. Nothing is without its reward.
    Best wishes in life and the contest.
    Peace in light and love
    Noah

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Well I like this Crimsondew
    There are so many times in our life's that time is lost and never to be regained good luck in the contest be well

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