How dare you make me think of you
And want you by my side.
As a constant reassurance that
It's not me you want to hide
How dare you swagger in my life
Upset my perfect world.
How dare you be the one for me
And belong to another girl.
How dare you let me halfway in
With one foot in the door
How dare you hide the thing I want
Then give me so much more.
How dare you always have to go.
And her you can't seem to leave
You'll stay with her, not happy at all.
When you could be just that with me.
How dare you fill my heart with hope,
That one day you might be mine.
How dare fate fight to take that away.
Meaning nothing of the kind.
How dare you make me wonder if
You'll be my "one that got away"
The one I never really had
Or if you'll ever want to stay.
I hate how you adore me
And that I'm head over heels for you
How dare you have the strength to know
The difference between the two
How dare you have to hide your feelings
To pretend there's no desire.
How dare you control our burning flame
That should be our raging fire.
I hate that once I make my mind
To take my sanity
Run and hide.
You show up in the nick of time
To completely change what I've dared decide.
How dare you give me butterflies
Brighten my day with just your eyes
Shrink my ego down a size.
And love someone I'd rather despise.
How dare you make me so confused.
Mostly elated but sometimes used
Ninety percent smiling and ten percent bruised
And dare force me to face
What I've dared to refuse.
How dare you never let me use
My once reliable charm,
But then you slip up and let me see
Goosebumps race down your arm.
How dare you call and make me feel
Eight billion separate things.
Alll the while, with a stupid smile
Because it was you at the end of the ring.
How dare you conjure patience
That I can't seem to find
How dare you make me love you
And hate you all the time.
I hate that you bring out my best
While daring to point out my worst.
At that you succeed where all others have failed.
So how dare you be the first.
How dare you make me not give a damn.
That my heart will probably break.
When long ago, I swore never again
Would I let allow that same heartache.
How dare you refuse to agree with me
You think you're always right
Not because you have all the right answers
Just more ammo to win the fight
How dare you love to make your point
About things I won't admit.
The dept at which you see right through me
Is something I'll never get
How dare you make me change my mind
About the views I had all set and defined
Of redneck southerners with a racist mind
To southern gentlemen smart and refined.
I damn your ability to skew my views
Of politics, racism and such on the news
How dare you always open my eyes
To a view that takes me by surprise.
How dare you make me want to speak
Of things I know make me seem weak
How dare you bring out such emotion
I usually hide with such devotion.
How dare you have the right idea
With strength to keep me at bay
But sometimes you let your heart decide
And you just can't stay away
How dare you have so much to teach
And way to much to learn
About love and happinedd and the meaning of life
That it's ok to take your turn.
Damn your dance, your fight, your smile.
Damn your guard where I'll sit awhile
Damn your eyes that hold my gaze
And damn those hand that keep me dazed.
You're all I said I'd never want
While being everything I need.
For my sanity I should stay away
But instead with you I plead:
That please for once I hope you'll stay
While I kneel at my bed, look up and pray
That maybe this might be ok
My bad luck might just go away.
That you'll save me a smile to help the pain
And forget bad things that happend today.
It's hard to convey just what I think.
It doesn't even make sense to me.
The single life is what I wanted
I should enjoy my being free.
Free however, is not what I'd call this
When all I really do
Is pretend I'm thinking something else
While I dare to think of you.
So how dare you always laugh me to tears
At some stupid toast over bricks at the beer,
Funny stories from crazy ears,
Or something unedited not meant for my ears.
I dread how now it turns me on
When I hear your Charlie Daniels song,
All the times you prove me wrong,
And look out for me even when you're gone.
How dare you act like you don't love
My reactions when I'm mad.
You push my buttons to piss me off
Like its the most fun you've ever had.
How dare you be completely different
From me and all my friends
With your confederate flags and nigger jokes
That never seem to end
How dare sometimes you act as if
You can't get enough of me
Then how dare you change your mind
And I don't heard from you for a week.
How dare you always play these games
That to me serve no purpose.
I'll be right about to say forget it
And then something that's worse is
As much as I know I should let go
Of this thing thats deemed so worthless.
Only to feel a something so real.
That something that makes it all worth this.
How dare that everything you touch
Seems to turn to gold.
Everyone loves you, not just me.
So how dare I be so bold.
As to think I'll get to steal you away
From a girl who's more like you
Instead of me, whose take on life
Is a little left of your point of view.
Theres really not much left to to
But pretend I don't love you and smile on cue
Pity the fool who dares fall for me
While I dare continue falling for you
I hate the way we have to hide
How we are when we're alone
But not enough to bid adieu
And leave your cheating ass alone.
How dare you already seem to think
I couldn't possibly do better.
You, however, definitely could
Trust me, I know, I've met her.
How dare you make me have to choose
Someone else who's just not you.
Too late to try to spare him the pain
Of my knife in his back, engraved with your name.
How dare you hinder my capacity
To love another and avoid the tragedy
Of handing over a heart untrue,
Because a good bit of the thing belongs to you.
And so the cycle continues on.
Because maybe without you there,
I won't have to bear the pain of losing
A man I have to share.
I'm truly sorry
It's not ok.
To pretend to love
Just to run away
From the one I think about everyday
From the endless games you love to play
To do unto another what you do all day
To this girl to dumb to walk away.
How dare that this be so unfair
That I have to ignore my heart
And pretend I don't care
When to her I hear I love you baby
And act like it doesn't drive me crazy.
How dare you treat me just as such
Not a soul would ever suspect
That while you love to grind my nerves
You do it out of respect.
How dare that you pretend to think
That you are all sorts of immune
To sadness and madness and whatever else
That could reverse a scar and make it a wound.
For some sad reason you won'y let go
Of whats obvious to me and by now you must know.
What you refuse to acknowledge and blame your self for
To torture yourself and pour salt on the sore.
And oh I know, how dare I try
To understand such a misunderstood guy
And how dare I presume to maybe know something
Of a topic that, trust me, I wish i knew nothing.
A topic so broad,
it reeks of lost love.
Not that of a breakup,
But a loved one above.
It might start out nostalgic,
A bittersweet thought.
But if one isn't careful,
Then on comes The Knot.
Felt in the stomach
The bane of an existence
Of the one who lacks the needed resistence
To the grip it has on a broken heart
That should never have broken
From the very start.
The Knot, however,
Can be untied.
When one by one
You unwravel the lies
That keeps a memory
To fester and hide.
Drowning in tears, you refused that you cried.
And so how dare you barely try
To work out your pain, not toss it aside.
Not save it for later
All set to attack
Those naive enough
To dare give their back.
Sometimes I think you see what you do
And avoid me for a month or two.
How dare you suddenly dissapear
With morals I haven't seen all year.
How dare you keep me so addicted
To what I know I shouldn't have.
Burning lust left unrestricted
Spiraling down this broken path.
How dare I give you so much pull
At my heart, you just don't know
When even my brain says, "Do whats right"
When to the left I can't help but go.
I hate when you leave it up to me
With you, I have no will.
No strength to stop this going on
To let my racing heart be still.
How dare you try to just be friends
When you know that never works.
How dare you make me so afraid
Someone will serve me my "just desserts"
I'm sorry to her for doing this
Wrecking her perfect world.
How dare you get the best of both
Worlds with two different girls.
Like that stupid song that never ends
How dare you show your face again
How dare you stir up memories
I had locked in a box without any keys.
How dare this poem never stop
Even to soothe a cramping hand
Nor this ache, cramping my heart
That belongs to a taken man.
Author notes
AlittleWrong
option 1 in love with someone taken
Option e: As long as you're mine
26 slipknot - snuff
Option 2b in love with someone ill never have
catepillar
"When love is kind, cheerful and free, love's sure to find welcome from me. But when love brings heartache and pang, tears and such things, love may go hang"- Thomas Moore
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That was really long. But you rhymed well and had a good story line. Thanks for entering and best of luck.
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I'm amazed how you kept the rhyme going right through, especially considering how long this poem is. Amazing write! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
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This was too long for my taste, I couldn't make it through the entire thing but some of the stanzas I did read were fantatic. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Very powerful words indeed, so much anger in this. It got a little long and repetative but still it was good. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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How dare you swagger in my life
Upset my perfect world.
How dare you be the one for me
And belong to another girl.
Not that my world was perfect- it wasn't.
But now more than ever I understand that stanza!
How dare you make me so confused.
Mostly elated but sometimes used
Ninety percent smiling and ten percent bruised
That was a clever stanza, I love dthe rhyme scheme there...
How dare you make me want to speak
Of things I know make me seem weak
How dare you bring out such emotion
I usually hide with such devotion.
Wow... this is amazing too... I have this sisue... and it always leads to regret...
Free however, is not what I'd call this
When all I really do
Is pretend I'm thinking something else
While I dare to think of you.
Wow, something else!! You have this amazing ability to find things That I think about my own life and turn them into something else, into words that people can actually understand, instead of a jumbled mess I usually end up with.
How dare you already seem to think
I couldn't possibly do better.
You, however, definitely could
Trust me, I know, I've met her.
Love your sense of humour in that. Like a comic relief in the midst of the tale.
Wow... I LOVED That last stanza...!
The rhyme scheme was off in places, it jumped about a bit... but for a poem as long as this, it really w as very good.
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wow.... that was loooooong, but fascinating! a very, very good piece you have here. it was incredibly heartfelt and moving, i liked it a lot!
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WOW! You had alot to vent here and I hope it helped
This was a wonderful written piece here that I enjoyed. Thank you for your entry and good luck
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Whew, a lot of things to say in a whirlwind of words!!!
Its good to let it out there, this really was one of my favorites to read, because I feel like I could really connect and some of the metaphors you used were brilliant.
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How dare you fill my heart with hope,
That one day you might be mine.
How dare fate fight to take that away.
Meaning nothing of the kind.
and
How dare you make me change my mind
About the views I had all set and defined
Of redneck southerners with a racist mind
To southern gentlemen smart and refined.
Oh my such a daring write, I loved it.
Kudos
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thanks. lol it was beyond a whirlwind. i hope that i never ever ever ever have to have those feelings and thoughts ever ever again. it was absolutely ridiculous. seriously... thanks for your comment! lol people either love it or hate it. most think its too long. But that was the point!
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I didn't think it was too long, I mean it was long but it was good and still held my attention, so it was worth reading it.
This really was amazing.
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Would you mind reading a few of my poems and letting me know what you think? Thanks in advance.
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Positive: first of all, wow what an well written poem the emotion boomed out from this poem a real siren. I LOVED "How dare you control our burning flame
That should be our raging fire." awesome work.
Negative: none that i can think of length was a bit long though.
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I wanted to cry
Reading this made me sad for you. Reading this was like reliving my past, writing something I never could and telling how much I wanted what I just couldn't have. Your poem exceeds my expectations for this contest and I have to say I have never read something so true to my own heart. Thank you for entering and good luck.
P.s You have a few spelling errors you might want to fix.
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too long for my preference but i didn't have a limit so that's my fault. the way you developed the idea "how dare you.." was clever and interesting to follow. the poem itself shows great poetic talent and your rhyme scheme is incredible. thanks for entering!
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WOW, a long write but it held my interest wondering if it was going to end (the relationship not the poem...LOL). This is some powerful writing and r=the repeating "how dare you" worked well.
Very nicely written, need to run this through a spell checker though, a few mis-spelled words here.
Brother Dennis
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Great write well written with conversation qualities.
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The Poetic Bandits
I liked the conversational nature, and how the frustration flared through.
I didn't like the repetition though, I thought it was a bit too much.
Shari
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I liked the repetition and the use of the title. I also like how caught up and frustrated the voice was and the almost inability to stop writing, to stop thinking about him. Cheers
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Congrats on the Trophies
This is truly a amazing write, I see why you won all the trophies. I enjoyed this write and that it keep my attention. And how I felt the pain and hurt with ever word. LISA
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Congrats on the Trophies this has won
The length in this is rather intimidating for me but I enjoyed the flow of rhyme and passion and emotions as you strongly express what is what! Very nicely done.
Best of Luck in all Future Contests
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Stay safe
~Manda
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Outstanding
This is very long but is so well-written that it held my attention throughout. I liked how you explored your thoughts and feelings and made this a poem that everyone can relate to at some point in their lives. The irony is strong throughout. Best of luck in the contests
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A well rhymed/written poem there wasn't anything wrong(other than its unusual length)with it.If you had posted half of it,you would have had a much better
response......George
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Your emotions were quite strong and very evident but I think the biggest downfall to this piece, besides its length, is your repetition
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im sorry im not sure this is what i waz looking for. theres no base no this. sorry
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This tells no story; it is neither ballad nor narrative. In order to make room for those entries that do meet the requirements, I will remove this one from the contest. celtic queen
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this is AMAZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZING!!!!
Ha it took a lot for me to keep reading because of the length but the emotion in every single stanza is just fantastic.
Every bit of it hit home because it's exactly how I feel but I loved the stanzas:
"I hate that once I make my mind
To take my sanity
Run and hide.
You show up in the nick of time
To completely change what I've dared decide."
"How dare you call and make me feel
Eight billion separate things.
Alll the while, with a stupid smile
Because it was you at the end of the ring."
"How dare you make me not give a damn.
That my heart will probably break.
When long ago, I swore never again
Would I let allow that same heartache."
"How dare you love to make your point
About things I won't admit.
The dept at which you see right through me
Is something I'll never get"
"How dare you make me change my mind
About the views I had all set and defined
Of redneck southerners with a racist mind
To southern gentlemen smart and refined."
"I damn your ability to skew my views
Of politics, racism and such on the news
How dare you always open my eyes
To a view that takes me by surprise."
Something about each of these just hit a sore spot everytime...
Sorry for the really long comment haha.
Reallllly well done, I struggle with just writing 5stanza long poems!
Well done, thanks for entering and best of luck in my contest.
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aww.
Damn, this is too good but it is soo past 65 lines. i'm sorry.
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To be honest, if you're going to make a poem so long, then you need to make it slightly more varied. I felt like you were generally repeating ideas over and over. For such a long poem, I would have appreciated a little more variation from stanza to stanza.
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okay WOW!!! Ill admit this is a very good write.. But damn, its so long!!!
Its hard to keep focused on this write when it is that dang long... It was a very good write but on times i kinda drifted away...
This was my favorite stanza:
How dare you conjure patience
That I can't seem to find
How dare you make me love you
And hate you all the time.
Right there, i know exactly how you feel.... It was an amazing stanza!!!!
Keep up the great work & good luck in my contest!
Shannon*Leah
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The last contest you entered this into. 10 words only contest. Inspired by the picture lol
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I think this was great...Who know someone on the earth knew exactly what I felt...It took me two years to be able to walk away from him but I finally did it. Thanks so much for this one...It made me cry..but I needed to cry.. Thanks again
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this was a very long and repetative poem, but i couldn't stop reading. I have been on your side of the hurt, where i want him so bad but he belonged to her (we didn't cheat on her but i know the pain) I still find myself falling for him every now and again.) and as of right now I am on the man's side of this, where he wants me n i want him but i have the other one that i love and won't leave...this one really made my heart ache for the lost loves I'm dealing with, o how i wish i could have them all, but i am in love with my one and only, and i shall forever cry of the losts...
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the rhyming was excellent but there were alot of stanzas that didnt add anything to the poem, alot of wasted words, thank you for entering and good luck
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It is a very good piece, but it is too long, with too much repetition. In a shorter poem, the repetition would go well, but not for such a long piece. The poem drags on unnecessarily.
Also, this stanza:
"I hate that once I make my mind
To take my sanity
Run and hide.
You show up in the nick of time
To completely change what I've dared decide."
Has five lines, when all the other ones have four. I can't tell if this was on purpose or not, but it upsets the meter.
Also, I feel that it does not really relate to the meaning of the song lyric that you chose.
Thank you for taking interest in my contest.
~Memoirs
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this is so good but its way to long soory but i really love i
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Like from my own mouth, mind, and heart....Unbelievable. Speechless.
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great write
love it and it's unfortunate that i can relate in the current situation.... and this is how i feel right today OMG.... this one touched home i'm glad you wrote -
i finally finished!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! yes!!!!!!!!!!! i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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should be i dont hear from you for a wee
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I read all of this, all the way down.
i was glued, not really by your writing style, but just by how much i can relate, my best friend and i... anyways...
'You're all I said I'd never want
While being everything I need.
For my sanity I should stay away
But instead with you I plead:'
this really captivated me, maybe too long, but i read it all. i promise
thanks for entering
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All has an extra l.and dept should be depth it should be and way too much to learn.happinedd should be happiness hand should be hands happend should be happened. i have to go ill finish the rest later. up to free however
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first of all, that is a really good musical !! lol no but i love this!! i think it's a little TOO long- there are a few stanzas that don't need to be there. I get the impression from your title that you've posted a lot of drafts of this, but if you're still looking for a peer editor at all I would be happy to give you my more specific opinions! anyway, I like your style, and how, for the most part, you did not "force" any rhyming. I can relate to this feeling SO well, and I love how you portray it. def. a potential finalist
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Thank you for entering my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. However, you seem to have misunderstood the purpose of it. For your poem makes no mention of either poetry or poets! Maybe the speaker in this poem is intended to represent a poet - but this is not made clear in the text itself, and it is on the basis of the text itself that a competition judge must decide. Sorry - but for this competition your entry has to be considered a "non-starter". But I wish you luck with it elsewhere!
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i loved this, beautiful write!
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Yes, I did read the whole thing, I promise. It flows so easily and the rhyme scheme is interesting, so it didn't drag on at all, even though it's so long.
There are many different feelings in this one, all wound into one tight ball that is imperfect love.
Basically, I liked this a lot. Thanks for entering!
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Holy shit, this was the longest of all poems i have ever read... Very good though, and well written.. I think you have used how dare you way to many times and it would of been stronger without repeated it over and over again.. but very well written... keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
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This was well written! I have to say I know the feeling all too well, & I've been here. Recently, actually, but eventually you learn to move forward, I guess.
-How dare I give you so much pull
At my heart, you just don't know
When even my brain says, "Do whats right"
When to the left I can't help but go.
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Yeaaaup. I certainly know what that's like ! Beautifully put. Thanks for entering & best of luck! ♥
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Well it is rather long. And I have a short attention span, but of what I read it was very interesting, and to hear that it took so long to write I give you credit.Thanks for entering, good luck
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This was exceedingly long for my tastes but once I got into the story, I had to read it all.
I would like to offer one small suggestion and that would be to break it into several poems. I think that you could tighten up the subject matter a tad without losing any of the initial emotion and that would make it easier for your reader to digest. At this point, it's an awful lot for your fans to take in one sitting.
Having said that, the emotion here is real and palatable and you absolutely deserve credit for that. It is not easy to sit and as you put it "vomit" up such real brutality in this manner.
On a personal note, if you never get over this man, walk away from him having learned something about yourself. Every experience is worth something.
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thank you very much for the compliment
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I read in awe, then realized you had not added what is requierd to the AN
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thank you, by the way
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I got about 3/4 way through this time! Much better nwo that it is shorter - AND so much easier to read spaced out, I would definitely suggest that you space out the other version too!
One part whic hdidn't work for me was;
"A topic so broad,
it reeks of lost love.
Not that of a breakup,
But a loved one above.
It might start out nostalgic,
A bittersweet thought.
But if one isn't careful,
Then on comes The Knot."
because the lines were so much shorter than all the others it's like they were put there because you could, not because they were actualy pertintent to the poem, and, if you asked me, I'd say you could take them both out, and then reword the next verse a little [ the one that starts "Felt in the stomach" etc] But that's just my thoughts!
I promise I'll get to the end of the other one at some stage!
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A little long, but well done. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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Very good write, when it comes from your soul it can't be bad. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Hi - thanks for entering my contest - I enjoyed this. Best of luck!
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it was hard to read but i really got into it and wasn't able to stop reading until i finished it. good write. thank you for entering and good luck..
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Wow...the writing was kinda hard to read. But i managed because i was well and truly captivated by the story of it all, Several people spoke to me but i just couldn't look away. Right now for my favourite bit
''How dare you always open my eyes
To things that take me by surprise
How dare you make me want to speak
Of things I know will make me weak
How dare you conjure such emotion
That I usually hide with such devotion''
I LOVED IT!!! I only have one bad comment and that was about the test language you used. I didn't say anything about not using text language but i beleave that it spoiled the flow of emotion in this poem just a bit. Overall fantastic write. good luck in all the contests and mine
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Wow I actually really enjoyed reading this, the length of it is kind of scary haha but once I got reading I was hooked.
I love how this is set out and flows pretty well.
Thanks for entering, good luck and well done on such a good write!
Rebecca
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