Were you there the day
as I told myself
just walk away.
It would be easier if I let it go.
Gave up the fight.
blind eyes rimmed with the night.
Tears swelling,soul blight.
It would be so easy to walk away.
Your eyes held me.
Watermarked blue.
No moon shown,starlit woven.
Held me trapped, no chance for flight.
Frozen seconds, endless night.
It was so hard to walk away.
Laughing eyes dared me to stay.
Trapped inside second sight.
No,I will not walk away.
And so I stayed.
Imprisoned in your eyes.
My mistake I am afraid.
I should have, but no.
You turned, smiling.
Do not be sad it is gone,
be happy that it was.
An easy thing for you to say.
But I did grow in your light.
Not a shadow of you,
but me.
Yes now in my own damn light.
I am no coward,
I will love again
With or with out you.
Author notes
D r a i g a i n e
painting by my sister Joan Hultgren , my horse , my cowboy
copy write protected do not copy,
thank you dear sister for allowing this entry, I did walk away at 59 it hurt, oh but I have grown and 60 is not a bad thing!
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Pweety painting. I like things from the Old West (if that's safe to say.)
The poem was nice. I liked it.
the flow was outstanding, as was the rhyme and imagery. Not really that much emotion but it was good.
Dax
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thank you, it was an emotional poem for me to write, I cried all the ay through it, sometimes emotion is a quite thing laced wth pain and regret
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Sometimes you have to go through the sorrow, pain, and regret before anything gets better. It's also better to express emotion through poetry instead of taking it out on other people. That's what I do and it helps.
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This was very well done. I could feel it compeltely and totally. Thing is I didn't walk away he did. And I have no reason anymore to care about life or love. So I won't. Thank you for sharing it is a good write
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never to late to care
I wish I could cheer you up!
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I like this poem. The idea of 'I want to walk away but I can't' is very good. I liked the way you worded it too. It was really nice. Good job here.
And so I stayed.
Imprisoned in your eyes.
My mistake I am afraid.
I liked the way you said 'imprisoned'. That's a good word for this emotion here. Good job. I can relate :]
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest :]
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my humble thanks and a grin
I did stay too long, but I grew from it and for that I am gratefull
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Words that I can definitely relate to. I like how you describe the conflict of the heart when it comes to love and loving ourselves enough to face reality and let go. Love really can be so captivating and we do often lose ourselves. It becomes a fight of strength to find ourselves and regain what is inevitably lost in love, life and within. Excellently written, thanks for sharing this
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my humble thanks and a grin
it was a hard lesson, but one i am thankful for, no, he is no longer hee, but I did grow, and I am glas he was here!!!
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I really enjoyed reading you poem. You did a nice job. Great imagery. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Night Mistress 1
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It was not Junoon. but i have bookmarked it and I will come back at your piece to comment is fully
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
I love it. I can definitely relate, thank you for entering it.
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thanks I am glad you like
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did this win a gold cup ?
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from you
And so I stayed
Imprisoned in your eyes..
Wow! you are simply a crooner!!!!
Very well done congrats on the gold
where did it go?????
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somehow I deleted the contest still looking
Drk otter
Well written!
Congratulations on the gold. This is a good relationship ending poem that got its due.
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I knw what I did, I thought I was emoving it from a contest and \i delted the entire poem
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Alot of emotion...
is poured into this piece. Torn between leaving and staying...weighing the options. Nicely done.
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My humble thanks
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Another beautifully written poem here. Loved the final stanza and how the poem finished with the knowing that love will always overcome dark times. Great write hun xx
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My humble thanks
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a very beautiful poem. stunnningly written
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My humble thanks
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Blind eyes rimmed with the night
Tears swelling , soul blight
Very beautiful passage, strong poem, feelings I can relate to.
I will love again...
Beautifully courageous.
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Namaste my friend thank you
and we still love I am just stronger for it
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And so I stayed
Imprisoned in your eyes..
Wow! you are simply a crooner!!!!
Very well done congrats on the gold
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ah thanks
I am fond of Bing Crosby
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Well written!
Congratulations on the gold. This is a good relationship ending poem that got its due.
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Thank you
the relation did not die, but was reborn, the power of the mind
thank you
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Dare
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A hard decision to make and it sounds like you got something out of knowing this other person. It sounds very passionate.
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thank you, it is a very personal poem thank you
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hard decisoin
yes very passionate, and I did stay, I am happy for it, our is an unusual love story bit it works for us thanks you
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Good job, I really like this. The line, "I am no coward" is very powerful. Thank you for entering, and good luck.
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good job
thabk you
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good luck in the contest
love always
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good luck
made methink of that sone, thought you were saying good luck you were daying good bye, hmm a good prompt perhaps or any way thank you
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