Peace
that dotted map
of this watery world;
string of tiny islands
archepelago of his-story...
she watches, signs of change.
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended October 30, 2008, 12 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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What?
Just a bit abstract? I like it, but your image of a world at peace is a bit forced for such a short poem, in my opinion! This is good work and I like it! For 20 words this one's super, friend! (I voted for Mr. O, as well!)
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I appreciate your comments and that vote...and Mr. O ... i'm sure is very happy about that vote too! Great news... Thanks for all, my friend ... PK
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oo. i like this.
-helen
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Lovely, hopeful piece.
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I love when the write lets us imagine the next lines! Well done- my mind is searching as we speak!
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OMG, living in a tiny Island, I could relate this to.
String of other tiny islands around come in a flash into my mind. this poem is not a mere description of Islands, I know. It's very thoughtful and deep in meaning.
All the best
Much Love
Kiddy -
Nice.
Paul
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Beautifully done.
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