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The Stain

The white flag of surrender is stained Red
Somehow the price of freedom has become war
Yet another head rolls…
The stained flag remains unseen
Yet another head rolls…
Fight for freedom or fighting freedom, all the same
When the price of freedom is war
Yet another head rolls…
The white armour of the valiant knight is stained

Author notes

this is the first poem i got published, i'm pretty sure this was written pre 9-11

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  • condor gold member
    September 11

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    This piece was very well written and speaks much of the futility of war and how we must not allow it to destroy our freedom which we treasure so much. So many lives lost to war, to freedom, to the senseless circle that seems never ending. Wonderful indeed.


  • BabyBun silver member
    February 26
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    Great use of repetition, strong and powerful. Great entry - thanks and good luck


  • Scyphon
    November 25, 2008

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    This is amazing, very powerful and true
    I love the repeat
    Yet another head rolls...
    Well don and congrats on the publication


  • Ellis gold member
    November 20, 2008
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    Yes, Amen to this


  • lilhatefulcat
    November 19, 2008

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    lol!, the poem is funny for me in a good way. reading this i imagined a george bush in a crusader outfit...yeah dumb idea... but still underneath the humour there's this powerful message...great work


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 9, 2008
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    thumbs up

    I love the repetition. very powerful, well done


  • aboomer silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    wow - very powerful! I really like how you have repeated the lines in this - great emphasis!
    Published? Congrats!!
    well done!


  • Swan song gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    To the victors goes the spoils and losers never write history. Very poignant and strong
    Excellent write excellent point

  • cheychey
    October 30, 2008

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    nice. i especially like the part about that white armour of the valiant knight being stained. great job getting your point across and making it flow at the same time


  • Gulfbreeze
    October 30, 2008
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    well done

    there is a lot of truth in your poem, it carries a powerful message. Thanks for sharing.


  • penman gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. A nice flow and well expressed. Thank you for sharing.


  • WolfHeart
    October 30, 2008

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    How many times does red stain for the good cause. This is very well-written and puts me in mind of "The Troubles" in Ireland, and many, many other causes that took their toll in blood. Very well done

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