scruffy hair and a red
sweater with holes
old brown hands
rake yard
mumble
never loved
a beautiful woman
never smoked
a good cigar
heavy boots stomp
dry-leaf hills
empty pockets
won't say a word
Author notes
prompt: empty pockets
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #20 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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so far I've read three poem of yours in a row - all gold trophy winners. You are incredibly talented. I love your style of writing - telling a story in so few lines, and yet, you don't short-change us in imagery and thought. How do you do it?? This poem just confirms what I've realized about you as a poet - I can learn from you.
Love, Lane
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Beautiful imagery here..Congrats on the gold!
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This is superb, I was made breathless with the colouring outside the lines work here. Best to you in the contest
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i love crotchety old men, they're so fun to write about. this is good.
-helen
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me too. cranky people are always fun
thanks
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you're welcome. and they are fun! lol
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you like the words : mumble, leaves, and smoking
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i like it.
-joan.
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