Unto the stars I lift my eyes
Unto the darkness spill my sighs
A better man might kneel to pray
But I have little left to say
And so inside myself are kept
The countless tears that I have wept
For weeping is a private thing
That shuns the pity it might bring
So I will lie with eyes of red
Through sleepless nights upon my bed
And wonder what tomorrow brings
Another hurt or better things
But better things come few and slowly
And I am useless,
lost
and lowly
With little chance to find my way
Before the night succumbs to day
A contest entry
- Your dark days. by The Hardest Goodbye.
500 points, ended August 6, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very well written -- Real Poetry
A common experience for many folks overnight, I expect.
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It's never easy to turn away and let something go, let somethr ing go the way you don't want it to and to trust things will be ok... I know I suffer that at the moment.
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aw i love it
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This is so amazing. The rhyme flowed so effortlessly and beautifully. You are truly gifted at writing your thoughts. It was truly awesome to read and i usually don't comment but this was great! good job!
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i like how effortless the rhyme was here, it was so beautiful yet, so sad, incredibly sad.
thanks for entering
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Awh!
This one is sad mister >.<
You should write happy things
Cause sad things make Tom cry
I like it though..
The flow was smooth and soft, like it should sort of be said in a whisper, maybe not even out loud the the point that you know you are saying it, but you only know breathe escapes your lips and the words die on your tongue and teeth..
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Such lonliness here, what an awful picture in my mind. It's so horrible to feel that way. Wonderful rhyme and flow. Love this poem, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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I found this by random reading. It's really moody and dark. All that came through. I really liked the last two verses. The other comments seem to think you're as good as classic poets ... they all died before they got recognition. Hopefully that won't be the case here.
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I agree with Frodofan, I think you are as good as the "classic" poets. You know what I'm gonna say so I won't bother
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A sad but meaningful poem with excellent rhyme and rhythm...Many will share your thoughts here I'm sure...mal
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Quite wonderful. I love the rhythm. This is very professional rhyme - as good as many of the old poets.
Keep it up!
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