Met him on a friday as I was walking home,
oh so handsome not like the other drones.
Blonde perfect hair and eyes of blue ,
I couldnt stop myself I had to make a move .
Time passed and each day little things came through,
how he seemed to use me as his muse.
He never showed respect and often gave pushed me away,
but I was so crazy about him I would just looke the other way.
I should know your no good for me ,
why I stayed so blind indeed .
He walked away and I would follow behind,
like a puppet on a string even though he was unkind.
When looks lie hearts shatter in pain ,
for he is a player and he makes the rules to his games .
How many time will I come back for more,
yet knowingly he will once again walk out the door .
Time wasted on the town giggilo ,
has had everyone and puts on a show .
Cares not for the nagels he breaks and tosses aside,
for he know he can come back and give them that look in his eyes .
Angels of this world wake up and take control,
let not a player take control this you have to know.
Be yourself and the right boy will come along,
and instead of tears you can be free and strong.
When he looks at you it wont be followed by pain,
he wont play with your mind little games .
Be a gentleman and polite and care for you indeed ,
for he is also being himself you see .
Author notes
Good luck and be strong be happy be yourself
A contest entry
- & I should know, that you're no good for me. by innocence jaded.xx.
1300 points, ended November 27, 2008, 37 entries
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I really liked this piece. It was filled with so much truth and held the defiance of young love & the fact that most of us are so naive when it comes to that
ahah. Amazingly written. My favorite part had to be:
-When looks lie hearts shatter in pain ,
for he is a player and he makes the rules to his games .
How many time (should be an 's' there :]) will I come back for more,
yet knowingly he will once again walk out the door .
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I know that feeling all too well. Wonderfully written. Thanks for entering & best of luck to you ! ♥
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Excellent
Oh so much wisdom in this my sweet AP Mom. You amaze me with your ryhme always. Yep I'd agree about the deception that well most of us have fell into at some point in life by the look of the lie. It is only skin deep those looks. The town giggilo MOM!! That was kinda funny can't picture you that way for you are my mom... LOL I love how you ended your poem on the postive not of the gentleman thank goodness that was the one I married. LOL
I Miss You,
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love Always,
Kelle Marie
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This is wonderful. I can relate to this very well, cause i know a blonde hair blue eyed guy and, well, he is kinda a player. So sad, cause he's really great. But know, on Monday, i just met this other blonde hair blue eyed guy, and he opens doors for me and walks me back to my doorm. He's polite and nice, and shows respect. He's himself, and I, myself. I really love this poem. Excellent job!
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This does speak to me, perfectly. I could feel every line of this. It's so true and real, we often be decieved by looks and forget to look in the inside, not the inside, the central core. cause the inside can be faked as well by those who know what they want. Great write, grandmother. It has been so long since I read something of yours, missed it.
Thanks for writing it, I hope many people will read it and learn.
~Noor
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Nice job. Beauty is only skin deep - ugly goes to the core. To many people base their desire on the wrapper rather than what is inside.
Mike
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Great job, infatuation really clouds our mind and judgment and we do stupid things in the name of love. Sometimes is hard to know when it is happening. Can make us look foolish for sure. Wonderful write.
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some real good points of view here. Hopefully some will read this and take heed. Maybe your poem with someone this pain, or make them realize they don't have to stay with someone like this.
Blessings
Rhonda
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this was beautiful.
so deep and so true.
it really touched me because this
is EXACTLY what im goin through
right now, how my boyfriend was
a player and i just broke up with
him for it. it hurts.
but you've described this pain
beautifully.
good luck in the contest,
this deserves gold in my eyes
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i love it, it makes me wonder why most women, teens as well as adults,[me included] always run back to guys like that. where you said
"I was so crazy about him I would just look the other way"
that reminds me of myself.
great write.
<3 amanda -
I wonder
Why is it that women love those type of guys. Well written and perhaps a must read for many women here on AP
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I love it!!! Excellent mom!!
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