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My Fish

My fish swim all over
In their big beautiful cage
I love them so much

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Written in 1996 when I was a teenager. Possibly my first haiku.

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  • Random Goldfish gold member
    January 19

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    Well, there's an extra symbal in the first line, easily fixed by taking 'my' out. Then, bam! Haiku.

    I thought this was very cute, I love fish. I think they're adorable!

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


  • Umi Juvariel
    January 8
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    I've come to notice a constant theme in your poetry. The last few I have read were only three lines in total, and simple. Overall, this piece was nice, and for the theme, appropriate. But it seemed a little too simple. It wasn't quite a haiku, as the first line is six syllables, but other than that, this piece was well written. Great job.