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Never Ending Stream

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Limbs perfectly sway
beneath the crescent moon
Scent of lavender
now overfills the room

Windows are cracked
the winds are chilly tonight
Sweet sounds of the owl
that is perched in the moonlight

Two souls, connecting,
as eye into eye they gazed
Holding hands, a single kiss
set these hearts ablaze

The future holds true today
wrapped in a passionate embrace
Yesterday no longer exists
as they study the others face

Changes from yesterday
grew in to today's new dream
and forever is easier today
because love's an never ending stream

Rocking back in forth in rhythm
they stared out into the view
A home of some thirty years
proved their love to be true

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  • babydollxgonexwrong
    November 4, 2008

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    I really liked this piece. The imagery was beautifully and very wistful. I felt as if I was a part of the poem. The only complaint I have is the ending lines.
    "A home of some thirty years
    proved their love to be true"
    It seemed completely out of place in the poem, and broke the graceful rhythm. But, other than that, nicely done, and thanks for entering! :]


  • Amera gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    By virtue of your screen name you are keeping your promise. I became lost in the dreamy passion of this wonderful poem. Mucho Bravos!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    beautiful

    simply beautiful.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 29, 2008
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    This is so beautiful!! A truly very sweet write sis!!


  • The Drifter
    October 29, 2008
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    Very good, creates a warm feeling, secure feeling, a happily ever after feeling.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 29, 2008

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    a wonderfully written poem that i have to say was something else, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • dustytiger
    October 29, 2008

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    wow that's a really nice poem! i really enjoyed reading it, i love the end a lot of people don't get that


  • HpWICKEDangel
    October 29, 2008

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    this is filled with such sweet innocent love. i almost feel envey because you have wrote with such passion. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. keep that pen a-flowing. you are good.

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