I remember when
you walked the earth,
a soulful man of peace,
bringing healing to all;
gifted hands from God.
Hand in hand we walked,
and calmed my demons
with a voice so soothing,
that I melted into you;
becoming one beating heart.
Your touch brought unity,
to my splintered mind and soul,
an understanding of faith,
to tame the lurking beasts;
saving me from my madness.
I remember when
God called you back home.
My light forever went out,
bringing forth darkness;
our love never forgotten.
Author notes
Begin the poem with: I Remember When
PALOSZOO
4. love is truly beautiful when you find it. I want the best love poems you can come up with...lost love, true love, sad love, whatever love you truly have or believe in.
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A contest entry
- for woman only by Mrs. C..
500 points, ended December 17, 2008, 43 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - big bang prewrites only contest by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 5, 124 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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how loving.
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not a christian but this was still great!
The Positives:
Lots of emotion and you really told your story well
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Your touch brought unity,
to my splintered mind and soul,
an understanding of faith,
to tame the lurking beasts;
saving me from my madness.
it had a fasianting twist to it
Overall:
I give this an 7/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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this i liked!
it was very well written, very well enforced emotionally. and very well portreyed to the reader. You should be very proud of this write as i'm sure your saviour is proud of you.
And true love never dies. it'd take more than death to dever the ties that bind.
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im left almost speachless by this poem. so many time ive though how would i feel if i lost brandon, and the short time we ere not to gether told me this poem would reflect drectly how i would feel. thank you for entering this beautifuly sad poem.
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nice memories i'm sure never to be forgotten
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aaww..
this was so sad but also sweet to pay honor to the memory of one so loved my friend. nice job.
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Very touching tribute to one who lovingly sought to bless and heal, and transformed your life with his caring. May all the tender moments be brightness to your life, knowing he willingly labored for your peace and joy.
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So sad. It is always difficult to loose one you love. The memories though good bring a hint of sadness.
This is a treasure of of a poem. Anyone who lost someone they love will relate to it and it may even bring hope and healing to them.
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So moving is this poem
Treasured memories that healed a heart and soul
Never will he be forgotten
Love and
Julie xx
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So very touching
C
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aaww!! this is beautiful, sis! best of luck in the contest. I hope to get some writing in this weekend, I hate working days...seems I never get anything done. have a great nite
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