You never know
When they are
Telling the truth.
They can tell
Big ones
Or
Small ones.
They might hurt you,
They might not.
You decide.
Author notes
Written in 1995 when I was a teenager.
What did you think?
Comments
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nice write. I realy enjoyed reading your blast from the past poem. I think you have got alot of talent even back then. I liked the ending best " They might hurt you, They might not. You decide." compleatly fantastic. I even love the backround you have chozen, I believe it was perfect for this piece. Keep the pen flowing, your words are like a work of art. Sorry I just keep going on and on and on, it is just that I realy like your poem so I will just stop all this babeling.I very much hope that all is well, have a nice day.
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I've always been curious as to who "they" are. I think you use the word too often here. Redundancy is a turn-off to some readers. I don't have a suggestion as to what word should replace the word "they". But it is a distracting use in such a brief work of poetry, that only exists of three stanzas. The word is used four times. For me, that is a bit excessive.
As for the meaning behind the words, I do understand.
april nicole
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