Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

the crackle of the leaves

the leaves crowd around our feet
the crackle of secrets as our lips meet
our hands are a bitter cold connection
the rush of excitement from forbidden affection.
the wind messes up the waves of my hair,
your fingers disentangle another affair.
am i the only one who hears you?
words escape your broken lips.
am i the only one who loves you?
your arms hold tightly at my hips.
should i believe you'll always stay true to your heart?
will those footsteps reinscribe their prints back to this place?
should i trust that you love me when we are apart?
will those spell-binding eyes still desire the magic traced on my face?
am i the only one who doubts you?
when you leave, i'm still holding on.
am i the only one who needs you?
i forget how to breathe when you are gone.
the leaves surround my lonely stance
the crackle of tears from forbidden romance
my hands are a bitter cold resignation
the lies rush through me at increasing acceleration
until you return to me, the wind will whisper colder
until you come back to me, the emptiness grows bolder
until you are here, i'm forced to live with lies
without you, i have to live without my reflection in your eyes.
please come back when you leave tonight
i don't want to let go of your eyes
please find your way home when the time is right
i don't want to believe in goodbyes

Author notes

in love

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 15 of 15

  • sweet innocence
    April 7
    Edit | Reply
    I enjoyed reading this beautiful, touching write.
    thanks for entering my contest


  • jessifer1792
    March 29

    Edit | Reply
    "without you, i have to live without my reflection in your eyes."


    This was a good write. And a good read. Thanks for entering... I perticuluarly enjoyed the line I quoted here. Good luck.


  • jayyniecakes.
    February 5
    Edit | Reply
    it needs stanzas.....

    stanzas to open it up a bit. then it would be better.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 1

    Edit | Reply
    lovely write. love is funny sometimes and i don't like to say goodbye too. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • Ms Raneika
    January 29

    Edit | Reply
    Aw beautiful

    thanks for entering!

    Love, Raneika


  • Sunkissed xo
    December 21, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Aww! This is so tender and passionate! I love the idea of two lovers under the trees in a forest surrounded by brown, crackling leaves, it's so beautiful. The idea of forbidden love that runs throughout this poem also makes it all the more interesting and exciting. The last line is especially brilliant. There are some truly powerful lines in here. Thanks so much for entering the contest!


  • Vars
    December 2, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i liked this poem a lot.
    it has a lot of emotion
    without being the length of a novel.

    this is a very sweet poem.


  • moonlitanime
    November 29, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    i love this poem. It is so romantic and passionate about life.

    I hope you never say good bye to each other.


  • HereComesTheSun
    November 10, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    very very very well done i mean this overall rhyme scheme is very hard and you did a fantastic job with it. i could read this over and over again
    congrats on silver


  • BrittlesSkittles
    October 30, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    thanks for reading it =]


  • sensualbutterfly
    October 30, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    An absolutely beautiful take on the picture and title! I love this write! It is amazing. I can so relate to your words. Thank you so much for your entry

1 - 15 of 15