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Retreating Into Shadows

Missing image

Darkness envelopes my soul,

feelings of failure infest

as silent demons reappear.

My head hangs, teardrops fall.

 

 

Confidence a stranger

retreating into shadows

choosing to hide in defeat...

such familiar surroundings.

 

 

My heart held hostage by fear

cocooning desires and dreams,

emotion disappearing into

irrational protection.

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  • jayyniecakes.
    February 9

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    this is really good... i love the metafores you used and the picture really fits to describe it.

    and i think we've all made irrational decisions so that we didnt get our heart broken...

    best of luck in my contest...

    xo xo jane


  • ScarletO gold member
    January 17

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    If I didn't know better, I would have thought I wrote this poem. It expresses so much of how many of us feel about our lives. I hate being hostage to the irrational fear. Where is the fear police when you need them???


  • Desire gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Holy Moly~

    The picture just dropped my jaw and then Your words followed- I found myself going~

    Powerful Voice Beautiful~
    Oh Yes~ You grabbed me and shook me silly
    Love it!!
    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 11, 2008

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    I don't know whether you meant for this to happen or not but you state something in the first line and then in the other lines it's more of just verbs.

    I don't know... try reading it out loud and then maybe you'll see what I'm getting at.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    excellent~

    This is a poem to me that reads pain filled
    But written with excellent flair
    Best of luck in the contest
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • superstition
    November 6, 2008

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    These words embrace such torment, torment and desperate yearnings to free oneself from it. This has such an icy feel from start to finish, and I have to say that I've felt these emotions in the past. Very bad emotions, but isn't it a relief when you're finally freed from them? Love this write, my friend....especially that second stanza. Very well-written.


  • Confusedboy
    October 30, 2008

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    such soft write of your heart that may cause you pain and lost of joy. I can relate, for days like that. Fear of the unknown has held many hostage in fear, not sure of the direction or way for us to travel. Never give up,or surrender to fear. You can make it, though sad days will arise. keep going and kick them, in the butt. The shadows hide many of us, but we still must come inio the light.
    Just know you can do it and be successful.
    I am rooting for you.


  • HaleyMary
    October 29, 2008

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    Powerful write. Lots of emotion expressed. I liked the last stanza the best. I think there can be a lot of truth to those words. Sometimes people may hold back from love for fear of rejection or maybe a fear of the love not lasting as long as they hope it will last maybe because they are young in life and may have other goals and aren't sure if the love will last long enough. Holding back from love can be irrational if people meet someone they feel comfortable around though. Anyway, wonderful write. Best of luck to you in the contest.

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