White blossom breath dissipates against the window pane
Haunts the pain, like denuded autumn shadows
they dance in the cold, grips her to the core.
Winter is here, the weather has changed,
threading it’s needle through the seams
Disrupting themes, destroying minds,
feeding the hunger
of the dreary.
Author notes
Prompt: Winter (max 50 words)
AP name: Rachel Kruger
A contest entry
- 50 words: Winter by whiterabbit..
500 points, ended November 27, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Winter is not my favorite season
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Great write and form.
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Ah....youy have shared the panifnul inside through your deep poetic words ..touching scenario and the touching impression as well..well done dear friend..thanks as well...
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Interesting word play here. I'm thinking the word seems should be seams.
"Haunts the pain, "
is a clue that, perhaps
"Disrupting themes, destroying minds,
feeding the hunger
of the dreary."
is metaphor for something stronger? Political unrest? Food or intellectual shortages as food prices soar or as news outlets filter the "nutritional" substance out of the news? Or am I reading too much into this?
Regardless, it makes for a compelling read.
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strong opening line and good imagery throughout! denuded was a new word for me, at first i thought you meant deluded. but checking my handy webster, i now knwo denuded is exactly what you meant. thanks for keeping me educated and thriving! very talented piece! well done and best of luck in the contest.
blessings *stomps
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