Took a trip to nowhere
Knew I'd never get there
Got lots of fresh air
Author notes
Anywhere is walking distance, if you've got the time.Steven Wright.
My pename is Billbard.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired - 10-15 words / 20 Poets by Kiddy.
600 points, ended November 26, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Word abnormality, context derangement, structual wankery, e by Progandother.
550 points, ended February 6, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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...haha...brilliant...short poems always leave me pondering because you get a lot more out of every word you read...the quote in the author's notes does kind of explain it a bit more but...I take more from it than the quote...it could mean absolutely anything in a journey at which you try and achieve something and know you won't get what you want but get a lot out of the experience...well done...it stands out because it's by far the shortest poem in the contest so far...until of course someone manages to make a one word poem...well done this has kept me thinking...a lot...whether you meant it to do so or not...
Oliver
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Great Job
Way better than my entry! lol...
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That's my sentiments exactly...get something out of it, great write lol
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Hahaha. I love it. The poem seems kinda pointless at first, just like the "trip to nowhere," but it had a meaning and a purpose to it, as seen in the last line. Nice job!
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A good prescription I think and, unlike one or two others, I thought the last line works just fine - made me smile anyhow!
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Always heading toward though never arriving yet still able to enjoy the journey.
Great Write!!!!
Best wishes brother as always.
Peace in light and love
Noah
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awwww, just for the trip eh? Well, there is a brave and wise head devoted to this write. You have described yourself briliantly in this.
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LOL I like those trips.
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i like the first two lines, however the "Got lots of fresh air" is a bit of a let-down.
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Sometimes short trips are the best trips, as are unexpected ones
Good luck in the contest
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I like this. The first two lines are amazing.
I believe the third line could be edited slightly to give it the BAM that short poems need.
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I think trips to no where can be fun as long as you don't get lost thanks for sharing good luck to you in the contest be well
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Clever writing. 10-15 words of your writing was enough to leave me thinking long after finishing reading your short poem. Good luck!
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trip to nowhere - talks about mortal humans. Underlying meaning, to me, is added plus to this poem. You may not have thought about the underlying meaning, but it is a successful poem
Thanks for entering
love
kiddy
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