A whisper in a teardrop
touched my lips goodbye
a memory in a heartbeat
turned into a sigh.
A rose within your coffin
holds my last caress
as I leave your face forever
I say goodbye, God Bless.
Author notes
Prompt: my lips held his goodbye
Sorry if it's a bit too maudlin.
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #19 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is lovely, it is the sort of thing I hadn't expected, so much elegance in such a sad topic. Best to you in the contest
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Loving the darkness here, you wield it well...
Maudlin, shmaudlin, I love it... Don't apologise for maudlin...
Such passion & imagery in your words...
Felt it, lived it, loved it...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Not really all that maundlin at all! I really like the emotion here, and the imagery is a sad one, I think that it fits the prompt really well! Great job! best of luck in the contest!
Angel
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