Easing to the raile
tantalizing lures
flicker, soft pulses
Prickles dance
lashes prance
lips entrance
whispered wisps
pulling deep roots
sans scanties... all or none
early dribbles
lapping morsels
Elvira's dwarf whimpers
Author notes
As the mind wanders, how can we rein in the abstractions, or better still, why should we?
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 15 entries 40 words or less #25 by mysticstorm.
650 points, ended October 30, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How can you resist fantasy's overtures?
Comments
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Beguiling
What a sensuous write. The words are almost alive. This is such an interesting approach to the contest teaser. I absolutely enjoyed each word,thought and vision included!
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I thank you!
Glad it resonated!
bj
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Very creative...interesting take on the prompt...wondering minds can be very abstract for sure...lovely imagery and depth in thought provoking meaning...nicely done...
thank you for sharing.
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Clever
Like the interesting approach to illustrating in a highly effective way how our thoughts can take off when unchecked. The language you have employed in writing this poem is wonderful - strong images and the sounds they suggest are perfect. An excellent work which I am delighted to read!! Good luck in the contest - they should give this one a really good look.
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Thank you very much
Yes, if we can allow our imaginations to run unchecked and let out the "stream of consciousness" without the overtures of compliance, then "stuff" happens and it is up to the reader to deal with it.
Creative "pass the buck" approach that can be disconcerting to some and imphish prattle to others... Oh well!, sort of like one person's junk, another's treasure!
Glad you enjoyed!
b
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The magic of abstract is that it can appeal to many people in very many ways. Words and phrases scattered, bringing images that will find a home in all hearts somewhere. It's a talent that seems to be gifted instead of learned, as I can't seem to nail it down. You are a gifted writer bj. I always love your author notes, and in this one, they explain the magic of abstract perfectly.
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Come on Now
Malmadre:
I know how good you are, I have read a bunch of your pieces. As I recall, my mind was intrigued with the stories, the images and the lyrical gifts that you apply to the abstractions that are laced within most of them.
Yes, you may work within a tighter context, but in no way are you limited by the absence of creative abstraction. Anyone who has a passion for art - writing, painting, music, etc. - is a person who is transported by the "flying carpet of abstraction". That being the case, you just cannot avoid using it to create, regardless of the mode. Think about it!
Smile!
b
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Captivating
Your words are simply luscious. You have written such a truly cativating verse that so accurately speaks to your an's. Exactly how are minds work when we let them loose. Like what you have done with the sounds of the words as well as their meanings. The title is the icing on the cake. Really adds to the reader's experience. This verse is so well done!
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Thanks
Glad the verse spoke to you...
Thanks for your comments and support!!!
bj
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Delightful
Wonderful word choice, each is so sensual and so visual. Adore the an's...how very true! Again a poet with an infinite variety each work special in their own way.
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so glad you liked it
I appreciate your approval!
bj
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Tantalizing...interesting...love the Author notes!
Az
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Thanks muchooooo
Keep your self whole, please!
b
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