Sitting silently at vanity,
bright lights show scars hidden
beneath makeup now removed.
Darkened eyes reflect hidden
pain, abuse and torment,
upon a broken woman.
Beauty stolen by hands
of so called lover. She looks,
she sees, she still cries.
Author notes
Prompt: old scars
30-40 words
In a list
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #21 by AutumnGypsy.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Poignant and sad
No matter what pain is going on in our lives we still feel we have to paper over the cracks and show the world a happy "my life is great" face. maybe more of us should cry in public and let go of the vanity. Problem is vanity may be all some of us have left. -
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Good Morning
What a wonderful and heartfelt comment. It is so true, we hide the pain with a smile. But when we stare in the mirror we see the painso clearly and wonder why no one else can. Thank you for stopping by and reading. I do appreciate it. You take care.
Smiles, Sandy
PS I love your name, "maninblack" reminds me of that amazing legend Johnny Cash.
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This is the worst kind of pain, it reflects what is sometimes so inesacapable. best to you in the contest
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Thank you for the nice coment. Take care. Sandy
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I enjoyed this very much.You captured the prompt perfectaly with this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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Lovely Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate the nice comment. Take care. Sandy
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Outstanding
I liked the intensity of this poem, you describe the scars and the pain she has suffered in so few words and yet the poem remains very powerful. I liked the simplicity of the imagery and the over all impact. Best of luck in the contest.
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Very nice coment
Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your comment. Take care, Sandy
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In these few lines you have captured what some women go through. Very well written my friend. good luck in the contest.
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Hello Melba
Thank you for stopping by. Hope all has been well. Hugs and Smiles. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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What a sad, but, true reflection of life as love takes moments shared and leave broken hearts where they fall. You say so much in so few words. This take the reader through images so vivid and remorse over memories. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you Dan
A wonderful comment from a wonderful friend. Hugs and Smiles. God Bless You.
Always In My Prayers,
Sandy
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Great take on the prompt you have most certainly created words of brilliance, this should be a contest winner, blessings with love John
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Great Comment John.
Good evening. Thank you for reading. Hugs and Smiles. Blessings. Love, Sandy
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