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Filled empty

Coins jingling
with debit cards,
hand in hand in restaurants,
choosing meals untasted;
smile plastered on,
for your pocket skips,
what heart thumps for,
eyes barren in their quest.

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Written for contest with prompt- empty pockets

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 1, 2008

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    This ws an interesting piece, my eyes were drawn to the misspelling of restaurant but I like this very much. Best to you in the contest