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Red Marks.

 
 
This time
reaching
for the knife.
 
       He said not to.
       But its OK,
       I wont slip,
       I'll be fine.
 
              Run it over
              past cuts,
              so I can see the mark.
 
                     Specks of blood
                     scattered along,
                     stinging agony
                     just like I wanted.
 
                            Why?
                            I don't know.
                            I have had enough.
                            Its all too much.
 
                                   Too many people
                                   know already.
                                   Emo is an awful label.
 
                                          Stereotypes are
                                          not the real thing.
                                          The emotional pain
                                          is what makes us
                                          want to inflict it.
 
                                                 Do I tell him?
                                                 I don't want to.
                                                 Scratches all over my leg...
                                                 What excuse will I use this time?
 
 

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Written at 11.30pm so im pretty tired.

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  • tuesdae
    March 3

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    Nothing truer than:

    Too many people
    know already.
    Emo is an awful label.

    Stereotypes are
    not the real thing.
    The emotional pain
    is what makes us
    want to inflict it.

    This is really really really good.


  • loveangerbeauty
    February 3
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    i love this..i get it sooo much
    very real, very raw
    simply amazing <3


  • silver-X-lining gold member
    February 3
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    damn. I know exactly how this feels. Exactly the last stanza. Love the confused emotions in here, and the way you get the complete, total craving across. It sucks to tell the guy you love that you've done it again and feel like you've let him down...

    well penned, good luck in the contest


    ~HH


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    January 31

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    wow. finalist.

    im speechless. you wrote what i needed to read.

    thank you.
    great job.
    good luck.


  • Hannie
    October 30, 2008

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    awesome poem dani...u no how much i understand !! (literally)

    Very very well written...;ike all ur poems

    keep up the awesome work


  • arnica karuna
    October 29, 2008

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    I know it is difficult to confess to people we love, yet it is the easiest "people type" to confess to. You've written this piece with a lot of emotions and of course, beautifully expressed. I could feel the hopelessness and the feeling of guilt that you talk about.

    Thanks for the write! Cheers!


  • SageyBaby
    October 29, 2008

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    my god

    your writing just gets better and better and BETTER. Loved this, amazing write, great use of words and i like the way you high lighted words too "Specks of blood
    scattered along,
    stinging agony
    just like I wanted.
    "
    Very raw...i almost feel the pain "Too many people
    know already.
    Emo is an awful label" amazing, one of your best writes i think.

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