From where did you come?
and what is your set goal?
when do you part with?
who dispatched you to my side?
fructifying of things
is quite different
It gives joy and delight
Frustration fares otherwise
distributing pain and despair
What sin I 've committed ?
elaborate me otherwise!!!
I oblige you and fall flat before you
life is a precious journey
and none are supposed to stall it of course!
i talk upright
without fear or favour
and don't try to tell lies at all
it is my parental gift ! pardon me
Author notes
Frustration
A contest entry
- Frustration by Polaja.
1200 points, ended November 13, 2008, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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The line "What sin I 've committed ?" seems to have odd spacing - was that intentional or AP being silly? It does that to me sometimes
... anyway - I really like the ideas behind this poem and the expression is well done 
... the ending was my favorite part - especially the talking upright idea - nicely done!
Thank you for entering
Polly
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interesting background, not for violence but {staff's} reconsideration of forced barrier ~
the beginning had me think of a stranger at the door and the oddity it brings, then exposing more had me assuming a summon's seriousness, but next it clarified as though with disowned conditions when could love could be brought inside...
underlying "fructifying of things
is quite different
It gives joy and delight" you've displayed need to be about a person not an obsession, even as my dad would wipe his glasses or apple on his cotton undershirt melding opportunities to see us as the apple of his eye though never clearer than who can reassure love based on a relationship that doesn't ricochet but straightens for free progressions.
your last two stanzas deepen for a fully meaningful bond of love,
called Carolyn
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