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Unblemished

 

 

 

Her hands gently stroked

the tender skin of new life,

willing her wisdom

to breathe life

into this new star,

to remain unscathed

by deep suffering.

 

 

 

For she was evidence

that the young grow old

too easily. 

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Prompt - Old Scars (30-40 words)

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 1, 2008

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    Outstanding. I am just blown away and left breathless by this poem. Bravo. best to you in the contest


  • daviscth silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    You did an awesome job with this prompt Gaylene!!! It has such wonderful imagery in it. Good luck in the contest.


  • styrofoam
    October 29, 2008
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    this is good. no extra words that i can see lol

    I love the ending. quiet and wise.