Chilly winds
Darkened skies
Luggage in his left hand
My hand in his right
His tender lips opening to utter his last goodbye,
...hush..
My lips touched his in these misty clouds
A soft kiss, I planted..
forbidding his goodbye..
Author notes
Prompt: my lips held his goodbye
40 words.
Picture Credit: http://aautio.deviantart.com/art/Parting-of-lovers-24271959
In a list
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #19 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is so sad but so beautifully written, you capture something so special in this piece. Best to you in the contest
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Awww! thats gawjus hun! muah! i lurve it!!
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A Great write
You have brought emotion to life in the picture.
Very well done!!
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Goodness!! this is your best poem of those I read today, it's lovely, sad, passionate and moving. Splinded!! Keep this up and best of luck for you in the contest. <3
~Noor
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Wistful
Lovely visual. Liked your approach.
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That was tender. Girl gotta soft side, don't she?!
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Oh Yes
And , like the still of the night, two lovers walk hand in hand. Love forever to be. such sweetness you have penned here poet.
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Stunning
They seem to still leave
Awesome work
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A soft kiss, I planted..
forbidding his goodbye..
So prudent and Clever -last line is superb
and i never knew 'hush' was the sound that gets produced while kissing! thanks for the enlightenment
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Hahaha. No, not really, the hush was so that he could not utter the word, the kiss came later
Thank you for your comment
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OH MY DEAR GOD! That was beyond words! This is by far one of the best! So serene, and calm! I just got lost in the flow of the words. The last line was the best, since it actually made me sigh. A poem as beautiful as this deserves a win!! Good luck with the contest!!
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Sigh. So beautiful.
I'll cry today.
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I love those last two lines...
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